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Root Yourself
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Root Yourself |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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Don't let this confusion set in just because there are no road maps no flashlights no trails laid out for you this is just you and you alone this is not a time to panic even if your path is getting darker and your feet become less sure shaking shaking hold steady you are a tree let your branches grow let your roots explore dig into the ground moving through the dirt like a ballet you are not less you are more you are not weak you are everything root yourself in place you root yourself this is not a time to panic you can keep walking with roots still in your veins in your mind they won't suffocate you the air is still clean if you take the time to breathe it you are not an earthquake you are the sky you do not end you will never end so just keep going the path is still there close your eyes and let your words guide the way it's ok it's safe a little truth never killed anyone you are not alone you are together yes you are |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
While your poem says many things, to me it says too much This act of repeating words and over doing their application and use can make the poem more disturbing to the reader Like saying less, but showing more a poet who cares |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
For me the repetition was most effective in getting the message across - and it is a positive message. Thank you for that! Helen |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
::smiles:: I thought it was another one of the innumerable forms of perfection. Wonderful write ! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Thanks! I needed that! Exhale, I inhaled your every word!!! I am saving this wonderfully grounding poem so that the next time I feel like I am flying off into the ethers, your words will bring me back down to terra firma! Well done! A very fine write! Sending you a hug of love and a "Thank you!" EA  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I LOVED this! |
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terasinas Member
since 2006-03-24
Posts 91Michigan ... The Great Lakes |
Exhale ... you are the sky you do not end you will never end so just keep going the path is still there close your eyes and let your words guide the way it's ok it's safe *enjoyed your poem, it's far seeing way ... keep on looking within ... nice. Loved ... a little truth never killed anyone ..." tera |
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