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0 posted 2006-03-27 01:25 AM



...but
I didn’t
know
it was a
crime

to ask

how many
steps

to the
mountain


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1 posted 2006-03-27 03:01 AM


Well I'm going to give some thought where this is going,
but I think it's about pacing ourselves!

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2 posted 2006-03-27 06:36 AM


brings back a particular memory...and a smile
(I have a strange sense of humor)
M

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3 posted 2006-03-27 08:21 AM


Sometimes... it's a crime just to breathe... or so it would seem by the reactions we're shown. *S* I get that with my boss all the time... so very sorry that you know the same bafflement/resignation. *S*

Excellent write, my friend.


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4 posted 2006-03-27 12:40 PM


Ed

Interesting to think of the meaning behind this poem...and the layers.  There are no sign posts, are there?....and nothing to tell you how fast or slow to go.  There is only the road and you taking one step at a time.  A seemingly simple poem, that is really very complex!  Well done!!

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5 posted 2006-03-27 12:47 PM


Worst of it is, that pesky mountain still refuses to come to me....won't even visit me in jail!

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6 posted 2006-03-28 10:51 AM



pretty much depends on the length of your stride my friend
and who and what you’re carrying on the way . . .

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7 posted 2006-03-28 11:20 AM


She ain't heavy, she's my sister....

Yeah, like that.

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8 posted 2006-03-29 03:25 PM


Eddy darling man, you never commit any crime unless its a crime to have so much talent.

Love the feel of this, it made me think which is always a good thing.

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy
x x x x
You didn't think I'd visit and not leave a little bit of me behind did you? For you darling man I'll always go that extra mile
xx

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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9 posted 2006-03-29 04:16 PM



I read so much meaning in so few words. Hang the crime! Ask anyway.

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10 posted 2006-03-29 04:55 PM


Ed, profound...with a sense of peace...nicely said...

And so it those we live with
and should know who elude us
But we can still love them
we can love completely
without complete understanding

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11 posted 2006-03-29 05:24 PM


lol....could anyone really answer?  Seriously, quite a provocative bit of writing, Ed!  .......jo
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12 posted 2006-03-29 07:47 PM


why even ask?
does it matter at all
in the grand scheme of things
when sometimes we crawl?

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13 posted 2006-03-29 07:52 PM


thank God the title was corollary
I misread it at first as, well...
coronary
it turned out to be
a pacemaker write though

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14 posted 2006-03-29 08:51 PM


LOL, Kacy....so did I.

Ed, I like it when you write a poem that makes me
really put my thinking cap on. Thanks.
Hugs,
Ethel

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