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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2006-03-04 10:42 AM

I wonder about the ocean there
behind your eye's sky
when you are looking here
with thoughts on tiptoes
and wondering of my sunshine

if it is really a long coat warm
but sleeveless for your wings
and if the colors of my horizon
would go with your nails
or would you need to hide them

in the palm of my handy
when we were pretending public
with the infection of our affections
and your girl is dressed up womanly
not wanting to be ladylike

or is it but a vested interest
unbuttoned opportune and friendly
for a parking lot passing
with a hungry meter wanting
and pocketed dimes of time

bursting to be spent willing

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daark

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-03-04 11:00 AM

You paint images
beautifully...

allowing the public
to be impressed,

and wishing they could see
to the heart of the matter
through eyes like yours.

An excellent piece...a

A Saturday morning deyelightful.

Air Goddess
Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 108
Canada

2 posted 2006-03-04 11:35 AM

Mr. Stranger...
I enjoyed this one as well...

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2006-03-05 03:29 AM

or is it but a vested interest
unbuttoned opportune and friendly
for a parking lot passing

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Uh huh~ I like how you leave it up to the readers imagination
about the colors on your horizon. And I'll bet you're good at feeding the meter too.

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

4 posted 2006-03-05 08:57 AM

very enigmatic melding where oceans and eye's sky comes together...I found this lovely...and whoever, but you, would think about angels being sleeveless or warm?

~ Karen ~

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2006-03-05 11:08 PM

"and if the colors of my horizon
would go with your nails
or would you need to hide them"

Oh.. nice.

icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

6 posted 2006-03-05 11:43 PM

but sleeveless for your wings

that one line made me drool for more, and you provided it. I got a million images in my head reading from the first word to the last, and wished for more.

Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2006-03-06 07:41 AM

humble thanks to each of you
for your gifts of replies

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