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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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tempest tossed thoughts leave me beached, floundering helplessly in my castaway mentality, like an errant whale in a drifting moment, sounding new depths unfamiliar while in a quiet corner of my mind I ride the crest of a high wave, remembering how it felt to be desperately in love the exhilaration no boundaries, no limits time meant nothing the sandgrains knew it to be true we would never count them all, though we tried for a time even as the storms approached; perhaps, we simply set sail too soon tonight my thoughts toss me about, in an errant beached whale of a moment driftless, with an unsound compass seeking unkown depths in surround sound |
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LukeMW Junior Member
since 2006-03-01
Posts 15Canada |
A wonderful metaphor and great diction. This reminds me of the poem I just posted for my first post... take a look at "Cycle" in open poetry if you want, I just thought I'd mention it since this reminded me of it quite a bit. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
the exhilaration no boundaries, no limits time meant nothing the sandgrains knew it to be true I love this whole poem... but these lines struck me like the unexpected wave  Excellent piece of work! the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Perfect Kacy! I enjoyed it greatly. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thank you for your comments, Luke, and welcome to Pips icequeen, what a generously kind reply, and thanks for pointing out the lines that grabbed you Lady, thanks, glad you enjoyed |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
My friend, my friend . . . so much truth, so much heart, so much 'poetry' in your words. You've reached a new high on my list of you. jwesley |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I know these tempests... and you tossed this one off very well.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
" with an unsound compass seeking unkown depths in surround sound" Amazing talent you have for putting your feelings in writing Kacy.. I so very much enjoyed this piece. Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Kacy I have often been amazed by your talent, but I hafta tell you sistah..... This is by far one of my favorites of yours,and in my humble opinion (for what it's worth...  one of your best ever..I'm still picking my jaw up off the floor with this one gal. You have truly, outdone yourself. Hugsssss  seek the flame within yourself |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Afine write here Kacy..enjoyed the nautical metaphor..thank you.. Goldenrose. Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"tonight my thoughts toss me about, in an errant beached whale of a moment driftless, with an unsound compass seeking unkown depths in surround sound" What a metaphor! I have a lot of those moments....lol. ....jo |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thank you each, for reading and commenting, for letting me know this one touched you. And to think, I nearly tossed this one out to sea. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
while in a quiet corner of my mind "I ride the crest of a high wave, remembering how it felt to be desperately in love the exhilaration no boundaries, no limits time meant nothing the sandgrains knew it to be true." It is nice to think of you in a time of desperate love. I don't think any of us quite ever forget those moments, but you put them together. Great wording here, Kacy. Hugs, Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Kacy ~ A fine piece of descriptively emotive writing! Your pen uses Grade A ink!  Hugs with love, Linda |
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