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The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

0 posted 2006-01-12 12:20 PM

five in the morning
clear sweet notes of jazz
from an apartment above me
low husky laugh
I keep my eyes closed
the bed is warm
the blanket soft
the dream of sleep
holds me
lulls me
the bony cat smells bad
damn thing won’t cuddle
wonder why he sleeps with me

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2006-01-12 01:01 AM

I can hear the “Blues” in your words. A little "12-Bar Blues" in the early morning.
Great write. I’m hoping for more of the same.

JL

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

2 posted 2006-01-12 01:21 AM

Damn Cat! Ha Ha.. another good one. I feel I have read you before have you ever been published?

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

3 posted 2006-01-12 02:14 AM

lol the part about the cat made me lol , thank you so much i needed to read a good poem right now , i am sad and cats make me happy there such cool animals they are really smart , some more than humans

so glad i saw the title of this poem , peace and poets passion ~JW

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2006-01-12 02:16 AM

Lady -- you have such a great wit! I like your poetic style, too. It was almost like I could hear you say the words.

....jo

weepingwillow
Junior Member

since 2006-01-09

Posts 33
Sin City-Las Vegas

5 posted 2006-01-12 02:31 AM

I agree with iliana it felt as if someone was reading to me...Nice write...

playing.with.crayons
Member

since 2006-01-02

Posts 362
Neverland

6 posted 2006-01-12 08:50 AM

Its like they're coming straight out of your mind and into mine... I can't describe. I shall only say it is superb.
A much deserved congratulations is in order.
always, xxx

farewell the ash-tray girl

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

7 posted 2006-01-12 11:39 AM

LOL..can't help but laugh about that damn cat...!

really cool bluesy write!

hugs, g

"We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

8 posted 2006-01-13 12:14 PM

Thank you all so much for your lovely words of encouragement.

I have published Dominique, but not this poem.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2006-12-21 02:49 AM

Enjoyed...James

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