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I don't want you to read me speaking.
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I don't want you to read me speaking. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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I stared so long I heard harmonic tremors in the morning where sunlight hadn’t yet clipped my curtains the vandal it is calm of distinguished - burning pride unspoilt by imminent blankets of ashes. But no pioneer in me exists I did not see you first And I forgot to hide you so I hold this sea sick hostage by pouring breaths down the barrel the only weapon I know breathe breathe breathe It is not my stomach that bares the pull and fear of uprising Deserter burning reckless Is all heart and I am nowhere near the cliff tops I have met and known intimate and wide So I can only dream in tunnel vision of my own sea envelopes to scream over every day …Over, by your side… Words that are waiting to be swallowed in eyefuls don’t want you to read me speaking they want you to see me. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Gemma, I have to disaree with "But no pioneer in me exists" -- I think you are a true pioneer in your creative expression!  ...jo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
i can't pretend to understand all the things you say when you write, but i love the way you say them. poise and grace, which is remarkable considering what an @ss you can be  |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This is another great one... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
wonderful expression...I loved the flow of your write, a cascade of words....well penned. ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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weepingwillow Junior Member
since 2006-01-09
Posts 33Sin City-Las Vegas |
Good write... |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
and I am nowhere near the cliff tops I have met and known intimate and wide So I can only dream in tunnel vision of my own sea envelopes to scream over every day …Over, by your side… Words that are waiting to be swallowed in eyefuls don’t want you to read me speaking they want you to see me. `~i am so close to being speechless creative write and with much vision gem nice ~JW |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Gemma, you grow with every piece you write. Keep up the good work  and then He created the horse... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
The beauty of how you write and what you write is beyond words. But I did see a longing, a desire to look upon love in this and you did it perfectly.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
dreams sometimes have a way of kicking us to our destination, even though we bulk and whine...hehe always enjoy reading you, your trained eye and poetic heart... p.s. your much farther along then you think, but, humbleness is also a very good stability. Love to you |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Thankyou, your replies always mean a lot. each and every word.This one is just a plain old frustrated write. The opening part was reference to the anger that sometimes takes over after so much quiet and peace, a build up, volcanic. It came out of nowhere and i was in the most vile mood, from being completely relaxed. Harmonic tremors are 'continuous high frequency or low frequency tremors lasting five minutes or more. Harmonics are usually manifested during or immediately before violent eruptions.' - in relation to volcanoes. Then to that sickness, physical and mental, where you feel like your organs are failing you, whilst youre doing your best. I was sick of being read by the person i was speaking to, I want to speak to them and be seen and read in that way, face to face. And hasn't anyone ever wished you could stand on a cliff and send 'sea envelopes' of the words you scream, and know they have a chance of actually arriving. free of charge. haha. Reading myself, i seem to be having a breakdown! i'll stop now. I hope you can now make more sense of what I've written. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Gemma! Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I, too, love what you write, whether I have understood it or not. Having said that, I must admit that I enjoy the experience of reading your work even more when I have understood it, so I appreciate your explanation. Thank you. However, it was nice to have read it before the explanation (which I did). One of the many things I enjoy about your work is the lyricism par excellence and your mastery of every word you use and the way you paint them all into swirls of exquisite imagery. Another is that it is deeply introspective. You seem to know yourself very well, which is extremely rare. It takes immense courage to allow oneself to know oneself. And the more you share your knowledge of yourself with us, the more we like and admire you. This poem is one of the loveliest of yours that I have read - and that is saying a lllllot! - Owl |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This stanza alone, Gem: I am nowhere near the cliff tops I have met and known intimate and wide |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I read this and read this and read this until...I could see you. And you are lovely. One more thing? I thought I should let you know that I consider this some of the best advice on writing I have ever considered. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
excellent! Love the way you write! Will look for more of your writings hugs, g "We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched." Lord Byron |
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