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Open Poetry #37

The Boy's Eyes

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

0 posted 2006-02-13 10:05 PM

Cracked with a bonded shield
The van pulled up beside me, stricken with grief
As the boy with solemn eyes stared blankly out
To a world that could not see him

Mimicking the depressed he cornered himself
To the back window, just to be alone
As fighting from the front seats
Incoherently dissolved into his ears

Battered by the stale air of the shut off van
His eyes blinded with predictions, never seemed to notice
The angel at his back, pale and shrieking in silence

It went quick; I almost thought it was a dream
Ripped in half by the truck with no brakes
And all the was left was the breath of the angel
Taking the boy with the solemn eyes
home

TreeFiddy
New Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 8
North Carolina, United States

1 posted 2006-02-13 10:17 PM

This was very powerful...I usually like to highlight a part of the poem I like, but I can't really do that with this one. It was stong the whole way through. A factor of the poem, however, that fascinated me was the role of the speaker in the story (in the beginning and end). They give a sense of purpose to the story. Incredible!

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

2 posted 2006-02-13 10:25 PM

Thanks so much tree... Your comment means so much to me

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2006-02-13 10:58 PM

I can't pick a favorite either Page but I love the poem.

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