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the wind is just the restless walking
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the wind is just the restless walking |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Justin, "The wind is just the restless walking" For a while every nightfall passed over my palms where all green bled the dawn we had no where else to go I could not think of what to tell you just my stupid grin beaming We did not know it then, but the streets were so crowded, so dark - - our memories good most of them I have left them there, behind the window Have you ever seen such weakness within me? when my chest was full with steady rain your laughter was my music a sure thing but all the while buried deep was the pain just as you are, you would never claim it as your own simple tracks in the earth I suppose I could convince you the world is ours spread across 14 pages of each bond we share, of what might be and walls of freedom Yet I believed beyond our breath to each other, the heart was not afraid when that night I saw you dream of beauty and quiet hours where no one loves you like I do In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes this art |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh good lord girl........... *moth kleenex alert* I'll reply more when Im done bawling...and reading it many more times...... god this was beautiful...............  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... ~ take only memories ... leave only footprints ~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
WOW, Oh my word! I just loved the title too. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Have you ever seen such weakness within me? when my chest was full with steady rain your laughter was my music a sure thing but all the while buried deep was the pain" Oh my Lauren...what talent you possess... you continue to take my breath away and leave me speechless.. Remarkable lady...absolutely remarkable. Hugs YOU! Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"when my chest was full with steady rain your laughter was my music" The whole poem is fantastic but I particularly like the above lines because that indeed is how love should be. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but all the while buried deep was the pain just as you are, you would never claim it as your own ~*~ Penning volumns again, you are... one noted word after another... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
your words as beautiful as you   |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
quote:i really like that lots and stuff  |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Yet I believed beyond our breath to each other, the heart was not afraid when that night I saw you dream of beauty and quiet hours where no one loves you like I do" woman....  you rock... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh sigh Lauren, you've collapsed me.. this is absolutely gorgeous..sigh and a  Mxx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Yet I believed beyond our breath to each other, the heart was not afraid when that night I saw you dream of beauty and quiet hours where no one loves you like I do" Because you believed, they dreamed.  outstanding! as always.."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Beautiful is all I can say. Eric |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Amazing...he should be sticken with happy tears...this was truly amazing, as you are. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ 'Yet I believed beyond our breath to each other, the heart was not afraid when that night I saw you dream of beauty and quiet hours where no one loves you like I do' Very nice~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I appreciate each response and the time taken to read....this was a ramble of sorts...and from a series I am working on "Searching for OZ" hugsss all and much love... In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes this art |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lauren, you have the most gentle way of expressing your poetic heart. You are always a pleasure to read...Always! Loving hugs, Linda |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
still sighing, had to come back for another read....magnificent Lauren! Mxx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren just absolutely beautiful writing, Lady. You are such a good writer. I really enjoyed reading. Hugs,  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ah to be a lucky guy...  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren You write with such grace, you captivate all that read you. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
talk about a magical flow of words and images this is beautiful |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you all .... I appreciate the heartfelt responses.... hugsss and love...it's a beautiful day! In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes this art |
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she'll_be_apples Junior Member
since 2005-07-11
Posts 22 |
Loved it all, the title, the poem...I'm melting. ~peace~ |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
beautiful |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"The wind is just the restless walking" For a while every nightfall passed over my palms where all green bled the dawn ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ our memories good most of them I have left them there, behind the window Have you ever seen such weakness within me? when my chest was full with steady rain ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Yet I believed beyond our breath to each other, the heart was not afraid when that night I saw you dream of beauty and quiet hours where no one loves you like I do ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ what can I say that I havent said before, and still my mothy words wont touch the beauty of yours.... this muse is truly a gift from the poetic gods.... as for your reply about this being a series... you KNOW Im first in line.  Yet I believed beyond our breath to each other, the heart was not afraid and that my dear is why the poetry is so amazing. I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
ikyk luv ya girlie...thank you In your light I learn how to love |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
The short answer: this is one of the best poems I've read at PiP -- yours or anyone else's. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
ED~ you have not only brightened my day but my week....thank you Sir...  hugssss you In your light I learn how to love |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yessss... I know. I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
The title..... The title alone is a poem, freestanding. Stellar stuff, Lauren |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I started to highlight my favorite lines... stopped when I realized I'd copied the entire poem. *S* To put it simply... this is superb!!!! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
... such answers are found upon the winds ... Beautiful! CT |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Oh...my god, that's transcendent. That's...pretty much perfect. Every poem of yours that I've read has astounded me, but this one most of all. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
feeling restless these days myself but have never learned to walk on the wind ... but something tells me that it is very possible when under the spell of your words .... ~~ lost within your poetic mind!! CT A word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05 |
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