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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

0 posted 2005-07-29 10:31 AM

She weeps
for the injustice
of death.
She wails
for how it use to be
before the darkness.
She mourns
the solace found within
now gone.

Her lashes wet with regret
for bringing a traitor into her house.
Now nothing will ever be as was.
Snowball that it became.

Liar that they were
are
always will be.

Her home is dirty,
the stench of her
part
is too much

and too many are
drowning in the tears.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2005-07-29 10:42 AM

this drips with sadness....

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

2 posted 2005-07-29 10:57 AM

Keep the title...

shed the tears...

and let the light come in.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2005-07-29 12:36 PM

an outpouring of emotion....

In your light I learn how to love
In your beauty how to make poems
You dance inside my chest where
no one sees you and that sight becomes this art

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2005-07-29 12:43 PM

A poem about the mistakes of so many, but it's what is done with it that counts. You are right too many drown in the tears, so it's best to chalk it up, let it go, and simply move on and learn isn't it? Nice write Susan.

~* Carpe' Diem *~
Tis only in their dreams that men truly be free, 'twas always thus and always will be. ~ Keating

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2005-07-29 01:22 PM

echoing all of the above comments and adding a hug

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

6 posted 2005-07-29 03:37 PM

I agree with Mysteria...you emptied your pain on the page. Now let the light heal your heart.

Patricia

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2005-07-29 04:15 PM

So much ache, so many regrets... so well written! *S*

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2005-07-29 05:06 PM

yes, very well written Susan~~

hugs
M

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

9 posted 2005-07-29 05:30 PM

Great BIG hugs Susan

Mxx

when we meet Which I'm sure we will
All that was there Will be there still
I'll let it pass N hold my tongue
you'll think That I've moved on ~Dido

Bodger
Senior Member

since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

10 posted 2005-07-29 06:15 PM

Incredible

Bodger

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

11 posted 2005-07-29 07:38 PM

This is sad.

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

12 posted 2005-07-31 05:57 PM

this stings...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

13 posted 2005-07-31 06:59 PM

honest, powerful and never pulling punches, as always your writing is crisp and fresh

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

14 posted 2005-07-31 07:05 PM

Oh this aches Susan..
Keep moving forward.
Sending heart hugs.

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

15 posted 2005-07-31 08:08 PM

Ouch....this hurts. Reminds me of things I have heard about depression and its effects. Time to open the curtains, open the windows and let the summer breeze flow in.

....jo

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

16 posted 2005-08-01 09:08 AM

Thank you all!!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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