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The End To Come
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The End To Come |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa 
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The apologies severed Deadened ears Leaving fragments of Unspoken ponderings Anxieties echo inside drowned throats Bolstering the finality The end to come Illness treating sessions Abrubtly ended Not just on this night But forever afterwards The bed will sleep and dream Half empty As past desires have lost All longings Hands upon face Quickly stop In silent stillness Fully ready Waiting for The impending change Which is inexcusably Long overdue Now, the end has arrived… Sometimes life emancipates The slave from his master And sometimes the slave Has it within his heart To forgive the master As he walks away forever From the only life He has ever known "I have gone away. The bed is cold and empty. Trees bend their boughs toward the earth. And nighttime birds float as black faces." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's just a hunch, but I'm reading "lyrics" here. A new song?  It reads like lyric because of the great flow. It's gonna make a great tune, I can hear the changes in what ISN'T there, actually, from here: "Waiting for The impending change Which is inexcusably Long overdue" to here: "Now, the end has arrived…" to here: "Sometimes life emancipates The slave from his master And sometimes the slave Has it within his heart To forgive the master As he walks away forever From the only life He has ever known" It's great subject matter, but it's the intensity of what I hear between those stanzas that I find most intriguing. Great place for some finger-lickin pickin' solos, I'd say.  Much enjoyed m'friend. I heard music.  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
an end is a begining when forgiveness and freedom to be as one is meant. peace not power love not lust growth not greed compassion not control joy not jelousy encourgement not envey trust not test truth not tales My spirit will rise |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa |
Thanks, Serenity... yes they are lyrics to a new melody I am working on, but then I have been working on quite a few melodies at this time, which there is not enough of, btw. MGROVES... don't take this in a negative way, but if you are going to reply to my words, then comment on them, just don't post your own poetry on top of mine. I consider that rude. I don't care if you call what you have read here crap, but please comment or don't reply at all. And if you didn't mean any disrespect by posting your poem, okay then. Just in the future, please don't. "I have gone away. The bed is cold and empty. Trees bend their boughs toward the earth. And nighttime birds float as black faces." |
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