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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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Deer call From their winter forest Night is dark However faintly lit with stars Outside a silver moon Rises over leafless branches Rabbits scurry across the field A single candle on the table By the fire the room is warm What is gone is gone forever No reason left to stir the cold |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautiful atmosphere and wise conclusion! Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
As usual, your poem is beautiful. However, just wanted to say that "raises" should be "rises". Loved the title too. - Owl |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Owl, Thanks for the catch. I missed it reading what I wanted to see instead of what was actually there, (sounds like a theme for a poem; feel free to use it). This and the two recent others have been influenced by the Tang Dynasty. One, if having lived long enough, can usually find something through which to respond to a mood or emotion however long expressed before. Thanks all for reading. John [This message has been edited by Huan Yi (01-05-2006 02:52 PM).] |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
How interesting! you are very into oriental culture esp Chinese culture. Your poems are like some of the classic Chinese poems, scene, emotion and a story. also like traditional chinese paintings...simple but full of spirit...yes, the spirit of the soul and the subject. I know that you like some of the Chinese classical poems because there are many wang wei's poems in your folder. It is very hard to translate Traditional Chinese poems into English. very hard. It has been a very pleasure experience to read your poems. You are a very serious poet, a wonderful poet. |
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