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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643
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Paperless Giving all my thoughts and ideas To you And it wasn’t even a minute later When the back porch Swung open and the wind carried them away To be said to others that might not care We sit at the table, aged with children’s hands And discuss possibilities of snow for the winter Conversation Bluntly boring And the teapot shouts a tune so familiar That we did not even notice The TV blaring incoherently at the cat Frightens the plants And you ask Are the bills all paid? I have know idea, So I sit in silence guessing what you are thinking. I don’t know |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
The sad lack of communication between an old married couple. Strange how this boring scene is so delicately and beautifully captured in intimate detail by your pen (or rather your fingers on the keys). With a name like that, I imagine you are French? I have a particular reason for asking. - Owl |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Page~ 'We sit at the table, aged with children’s hands And discuss possibilities of snow for the winter' How uniquely you tell the story~ I enjoyed this~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Enjoyed the read the words speak out to you. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
oft times while eating out, I scan my surroundings, and notice older couples, eating together, but sharing not one word between the two of them...are they sad, I ponder? Or are they just so comfortable to be in there own thoughts together? good ponderings here...well done |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you all. Although my mother is french my real name is not. The name I use is my grandparents first names put together |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I think you used to live at MY house. *smile* |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks for the explanation. There is a poem I thought you may know, very different to yours, but with the same ambiance. - Owl |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
I love this. It is great. I have never read you before...but I think if this is a small sample of what I can expect...I will keep watching for further posts. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dominique... You're going to become a  ...I can tell. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you Sunshine. Evocativeverse2 I have other posts on here if you would like to read them. Just do a search and put my name as the author... Again thank you all for your comments |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Good write! Well said and easy to understand to all-to-often scenario. jo |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Beautiful work Dominique. "We sit at the table, aged with children’s hands And discuss possibilities of snow for the winter Conversation Bluntly boring" Yes it is very telling. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
What can I say that those before me hadn't said. Enjoyed this read. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thanks Again, your words continue to inpire me to write more. |
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