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playing.with.crayons
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0 posted 2006-01-03 04:44 AM


Take this black and white photograph
A portrait of myself,
my life

Fold me in half and tuck me away
among the lost letters
and discarded Christmas cards.
The dated postcards knowing nothing
what their words are,
what they mean.

But I stand out now
no longer merging into the faded ink
and curled edges of the past

No longer living a faded fantasy
a mind numbed in years.

After all those hours, long and dark
with nothing to relieve my mind
but the memories,
etched onto my skin

I'm free

I linger in the autumn leaves,
saved, a picture floating in the breeze
but, He whispers in my ear
"It'll never last"
Now I know
my shadow amongst the past
will once again be my refuge.

Every breath shared
in the soft willows of the wood
between myself and my reflection
A lie.

Truths, like liquid fire in my veins.
I pick up my voice, piece by piece
and cry out

Won't someone take my black and white photograph
and colour me in?

© Copyright 2006 cheye - All Rights Reserved
aujussy wolf
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1 posted 2006-01-03 04:55 AM


I'm free

I linger in the autumn leaves,
saved, a picture floating in the breeze
but, He whispers in my ear
"It'll never last"
Now I know
my shadow amongst the past
will once again be my refuge.
  
  
  ~awesome , the first of your work that i have ever read and i really liked it
lots of whispers in this one , i ll be on the look for more of your writings
~J

littlewing
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2 posted 2006-01-03 04:57 AM


I like it too

*handing you a box of crayolas*

playing.with.crayons
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3 posted 2006-01-03 05:02 AM


*grins*
thanks guys, means heaps.
now if only i can find a way to stop wanting to write more...
hugs, cheye xxx

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4 posted 2006-01-03 02:39 PM


Your style reminds me a lot of... well myself   As such, I think your words are fantastic, and I hope you don't squash that "wanting to write" urge.

Looking forward to more

and then He created the horse...

whiskey
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5 posted 2006-01-03 04:27 PM


I really enjoyed this, You are very talented I will look forward to reading more of your writing and dont stop wanting to.
The Lady
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6 posted 2006-01-03 09:55 PM



Nice work...


"Won't someone take my black and white photograph
and colour me in?"

Midnitesun
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7 posted 2006-01-03 10:04 PM


I really really enjoyed this
and just want you to know
I adore black and white
as much as color

Dominique-Simone
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8 posted 2006-01-04 12:00 PM


Great write

Fold me in half and tuck me away
among the lost letters
and discarded Christmas cards.
The dated postcards knowing nothing
what their words are,
what they mean

playing.with.crayons
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9 posted 2006-01-04 12:23 PM


thank you so much everyone. I've only submitted two and I've gotten such wonderful feedback...
I think I like this forum!! I shall now go and write lovely things about everyone elses beautiful works.
always, xxx

exhale
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10 posted 2006-01-04 01:14 AM


Won't someone take my black and white photograph
and colour me in?


and what an ending line it is!

great write, first I've read of yours, but certainly not the last.

iliana
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11 posted 2006-01-04 02:12 AM


Very good write.  Know what you mean, too.   ....jo
HopeS
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12 posted 2006-01-04 05:43 AM


Wonderful write , I am often waiting to add colour to my black and white

Hope

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