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Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

0 posted 2006-01-02 08:54 PM

The Rays of Sunshine

The muted shaft of Sunlight
Crept through the gash in the fractured wall.
It fell upon its victims
With an antisocial motion
That disrupted the ticks of time.

Casting shadows too small
To veil my murdered eyes.

The ray that was once subdued
Evolved into a rage of luminosity.
As the shadows dissipated into the air,
The Light let out its fury…

I fell onto my back
And slowly closed my eyes.
And it was there
That I waited.
Waiting for Darkness
Like I did the day before.
So that in the Darkness
I could see once again.

About two weeks ago, I went to the eye doctor complaining about my eyes. Apparently I have something called ophthalmic migraines, which is a severe migraine without a headache. An ophthalmic migraine impairs your vision critically (like looking through shattered glass). Sunlight mostly activates it. As an aspiring filmmaker, I rely on my vision, so I have some aversion for light, go figure.

[This message has been edited by Edward Grim (01-02-2006 09:39 PM).]

Lotta Lagg
Junior Member

since 2006-01-02

Posts 19
Michigan

1 posted 2006-01-02 08:57 PM

I'm sorry to hear about your vision. That's a shame. However it spoke out in your poem so well. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
~
Lotta

"One Oneness One"

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2006-01-02 09:45 PM

You have inspired me to write a second site of sorts--I hope you don't mind, but I was moved by your poem and...well...

I hope you don't mind.

I think you see better than many-not that it helps, but I truly do.

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

3 posted 2006-01-02 09:50 PM

Thanks Lotta Lagg and serenity blaze of course I don't mind, by all means. - Ed Grim

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2006-01-02 09:54 PM

I have migraines, but with the headaches.
An intriguing write. I enjoyed the way you allowed light to flow through a fractured wall. Do you wear special glasses outside now, to protect your eyes?

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2006-01-02 09:56 PM

WOW! Amazing write..enjoyed the read.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

6 posted 2006-01-02 09:58 PM

Unfortunately no Midnitesun, glasses don't seem to help. I am seeing a neurologist and he says there is not much to do except wait for them to end. I'm on some eye medication but it hasn't helped yet. Thanks for your input. And thanks Enchantress, I'm glad you liked it! - Ed Grim

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2006-01-02 10:54 PM

My husband has a vision problem that preceeds a migrain...it's called scintillating scotomata. He sees beautiful colored lights that gradually get so large that he can no longer see. It sounds a bit like your problem. Your poem really described it well. Good luck.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2006-01-02 11:21 PM

sooooooooooo happy I was directed here, you write beautifully and these lines, oh I wish I had written them myself:

Casting shadows too small
To veil my murdered eyes.

If you had not explained, actually I did not see your explanation until now, I read this as a plea for peace and a rebirth.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

9 posted 2006-01-03 12:10 PM

I hope there is something that can improve your condition. Your poem was amazing; thank you for the insight behind it; it makes it even more meaningful.

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

10 posted 2006-01-03 12:24 PM

I am sorry to hear about your condition...I hope there is something you can do. On the other hand this was a beautiful poem with some of the best descriptions I have heard.

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

11 posted 2006-01-03 09:46 AM

Thanks everybody, I'm glad you all like it. And Martie, I'm very sorry to hear about your husband; I hope he finds relief. - Ed Grim

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

12 posted 2006-01-04 11:38 AM

I am so sorry to hear about your condition. Surely photo-sensitive glasses would help? Not that I am a doctor and I know your doctor knows better than I do. Beautiful poem, Ed.

I used to get debilitating migraines until I decided I didn't want them any more and I didn't - as dramatic as that sounds, that is how it happened. But then, mine were caused by stress, not a physical/medical condition, so I suppose that explains it.

- Owl

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