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Open Poetry #36

Gas station

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

0 posted 2006-01-02 05:07 PM

Walking into any gas station in Florida
On your day off
Always smells like you are going
On a road trip
The musty odor of a new place
The damp air surrounding your body
As if the morning just began
People dazed with plans of work ahead
Silently yell for sleep as they pay
Their tabs
Grumpy, the attendant mutters in tongues
Under his breath
Thinking he was supposed to be
In another place by now
at this age
His cigarette half snuffed out,
In the cut up tin can, struggles to say alive
While I search for snack
Finding nothing
I walk, sucking up the sensation
Guess I am going to go home now

Bodger
Senior Member

since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

1 posted 2006-01-02 05:08 PM

Superb

Dave

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2006-01-02 05:09 PM

enjoyed this

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2006-01-02 09:56 PM

You have a talent for bringing words to life. Great write.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2006-01-03 12:23 PM

yes agreeing with everyone . . .
I wanted more of this story.

This was a glimpse.

Very nice.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2006-01-04 11:42 AM

I love your cinematographical approach. Lovely poem.

- Owl

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