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In the dark.
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In the dark. |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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in the dark on the damp grass feeling every little blade between my fingers I can feel the rocks by my feet and the butterflys in the breeze that sweet smell of spring in the evening floating by my nose be careful it can sting there's this sense of emergency that comes from sitting here in the dark I should be elsewhere but I need this I need the stars to come crashing down on me a symphony of lights of colours galaxies upon galaxies gravitating towards me till they crash and create light eternal light to flow through my body like the sun when it sets on the mountains that blinding light to make it all seem bigger I need the ocean to come and envelope me in it's glory the waves creating a masterpeice natures art flowing and pulsing heaving and beating against me around me that sweet smell of spring in the evening be careful it can sting [This message has been edited by exhale (01-02-2006 02:49 PM).] |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"I should be elsewhere but I need this" - Yes, as we all do and even the sting as well for some strange reason that I've yet to figure out. Great write - most enjoyable! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Chelsea, this is lovely. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good God, this is amazing, melts right down the page . . . so much imagery, I love this. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Bravo! sweetie this is devine, captivating and was a joy to read...well penned. ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Perfect! Greatly enjoyed the whole write. Love, Margherita |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
I loved this one , a great write..paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
the way you put your words together paints a lovely picture feeling every little blade between my fingers I can feel the rocks by my feet and the butterflys in the breeze that sweet smell of spring in the evening floating by my nose |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
"I need the stars to come crashing down on me a symphony of lights of colours" beautiful. Must keep my eye out for you... excellent. xxx |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
why thank you everyone, much to my surprise, I liked this one myself  |
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