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a dark moon muttering
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a dark moon muttering |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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oh but this a bad moon be - watch me pinch four flames to three and yes, I know, I know you see me scowling in the trinity with a mirror to my chin show me who I used to be back when I was less like me and oh-you-so approved. Bitters in my tea design a dot dot dotted line--a sign-- a signature and I'd resign but damn how you begrudge the ink. Tell me what you'd like and I will pinch another flame's desire is that really what you want? Or was that what you had for lunch-- my god, I am, I'm boring you... so poof another flame, to two. You and I, as it was once, and I know it's not enough you crave the worship for the "one" and I am weary orb tonight reflections of your light be dim-- I am not her, and you? Not him. Poof. (I am my own reproof.) Tonight you've won your sol-i-tude. I am your moon--not mercury. Besides, this time? You're boring me. And when you're done? Turn off the light. I have already locked up tight. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Excellent, you really can write.  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok there is so much in this, its so thick, I love it, cold as ice and yet inviting. This: watch me pinch four flames to three and yes, I know, I know you see me scowling in the trinity with a mirror to my chin What a cool comparison, I love that, and I saw your finger do that, you know? Saw that mirror too . . . Your fortune, *smile* you are so smart , Karen, gosh so many comparisons here - the dotted line, bloodink, eh? And the candles . . . gosh, makes me feel that its your soul, m'Lady . . . This line is beyond amazing: I am your moon--not mercury. Damn you write so well, am sorry you are upset but you write well when you are. Totally blew me away . . . I'm whipping through the sky, K . . . |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
DANG !! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Poof. (I am my own reproof.) Tonight you've won your sol-i-tude. I am your moon--not mercury. Besides, this time? You're boring me. ~*~ One can be done after this? No, no, no...nanette... one can be undone... but never done.  Brava! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 There is so much to this..to you..never boring... I am saving this to study.  I felt you cringe!!! lol....love you lots lady! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
This hurts me for some reason. I can not bear to watch someone deliberately pinch out their own light for some one else's approval. or even think they have to. I do not think you could do it either so it softens ...martyjo [This message has been edited by latearrival (12-30-2005 07:14 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Damn...lady yer so good! Hugs YOU!! In the midst of winter, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Love this, serenity! What a voice, such articulation, such power, such magnitude! As I can never think of a good enough response, I'll leave it there, along with, "I like this a whole lot!" miscellanea |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I KNEW I was going to like this... with such a title, how could I not? *S* And the rhyme is sublime, the voice so strong... I was ready to applaud by the time I got to the bolded me *S* So... I think I will. *S*  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
bumble stumble toil and grumble, seize the witch and make her mumble, all tears could have been cast in vein the scrying web's a finer skein, and then of course there's vanity, the pun of logic's grave contempt archenemy of sanity that offers shelter's veil of tears and clouds the vison of all seers. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Wow! "Bitters in my tea design a dot dot dotted line--a sign-- a signature and I'd resign but damn how you begrudge the ink." |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
your poetry is just incredible |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
First I get to hug the ladies...  (have missed you Lady Helen)and C? sigh..that wasn't conjuring, that was an editorial. If I was gonna conjure, I'd conjure up someone a bit more appreciative for my dinner company than what I had last night. You like red beans & rice? Candlelight dresses up the meal nicely.  Too bad he prefers a tv tray...poof!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
mmm hmmm... I suppose I did THIS too: http://www.sciencedaily.com/upi/?feed=TopNews&article=UPI-1-20051230-15114800-bc-tropical-zeta.xml If I am conjuring up storms, someone had better send me some hormones fast!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hehe, but I do love the way you serve up a plate-o-spicey-beans |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen You're so good when you're good!!, or is that bad? I'd send you my hormones if I had any...you don't need any more storms!! I think YOU are a storm.  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I think you could start a revolution with this one! This is a really great write. JL |
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