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this is not a torchsong
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this is not a torchsong |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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I miss the moons you hand picked for me and the born again stars you'd scatter stratetically, the eye of the poet placing them between branch and eternity, now the night speaks in monotone; starless and moonless, the rainbows, stay locked in a box of grey metal, while the torrid affair of us chills with the sunsets that no longer warm up the ocean view; and i long for the alphabet soup you once cooked, the mix of the dirty and pillowtalk between the dead sheets we would heat, without the guise of forever that much of the lonely ones seek, the moons pass, but yet, i still miss me and you, and o how the heart screams your name out loud, since you've dazzled your skyshow in her eyes for now. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (12-31-2005 11:07 PM).] |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
I frankly suspect you were the real poet all along, penning your colors upon the scenes. John |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
I LOVE it! Billy 8) "Only the dead, have seen the end of war." |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
A poetic plea of longing well done. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
But I love torchsongs...  Here's one I sing a lot: "What do I do when you are far a-way and I'm so blue-- what do I do?" So simple, the above is, and yet, you are right that yours is not like that--the complexities are like the netting that holds the stars on your backdrop. I'd love to hear you sing.  You're lovely yanno. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks kids, and it actually IS a torch song, serene shh.....i just didnt want this one (cause he comes on to read me )to know how deep he went in. o well.............  |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
A magnficient torch song.... "I miss the moons you hand picked for me and the born again stars you'd scatter stratetically," I think they always know how deep... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Michele? One of your best, ever.  and libraried... with a very soft light of moonglow... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
you know Michele, if I didn't know better I would think you studied with all the great beats, right there in Jersey . . . I know you study with Mother Nature already. I adore this song of yours: and i long for the alphabet soup you once cooked, the mix of the dirty and pillowtalk between the dead sheets we would heat, without the guise of forever that much of the lonely ones seek, |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Its a keeper! Nice job |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
the mix of the dirty and pillowtalk between the dead sheets we would heat, without the guise of forever You said it ALL. Into my library. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Reaching to touch Herself inside: Remembering Some loves artist- His slight of hand- Smoke and mirrors She saw as honest, Some Houdini That tricked her out in chains-- She wore rainbow-rose glasses, Locked inside a grey metal box. Wronged, but still she pines Aching inside As his moon Passes through new phase-- All people feel the same, When mood is lonely. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this is truly one of the best I have read and I love the response of ice... saving both~~ for inspiration Happy New Year Michele  Maureen |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This really captures a moment |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Not a torchsong, lol. Seriously, one of the most beautiful ones I've heard, oh Inked One! Happy 2006! ....jo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
better and better with each write, awesome mishy |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
reading you when you sway your woman at the edge of suggestions stirs the oceans of my mind he is lucky |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
This is well written. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
geeze, I tried to highlight the part I liked best, but the entire poem was absolutely magnificant reading...well done, yes indeedy, a profound read! |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
i must say I agree. I went to highlight a phrase i liked and just kept on going... very well written, I can just feel the longing coming from the page... always, xx farewell the ash-tray girl |
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