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And Another Thing...
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And Another Thing... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Turn around don't walk away I've more to say Before you go You should know you caused this hatred birthed this baby of contempt with all your wanting wicked lies in truth's disguise and I believed... but no no more it's done...it's past I kissed your ass, but not again I'll stand and watch you as you go to have this vision etched in mind of you in leave with no reprieve of circumstance in retrospect in knowing of mistakes you made and debts unpaid that sure will linger once your gone... but go! just turn your back in stab it matters not to me you see I only wished to say, "so long", and hell no! you'll not see a tear in shed from vengeful glare of eye and, one more thing before you go... I loved you... Did you know? _____________________ *Inspired by a long-time-ago challenge from Serenity... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah HA! You write beautifully when you are pissed.  I knew you had it in you, and I, *hic*, am glad you waited... I saw the title and thought UH OH and then I almost ducked. Let it out, baby. boom-boom-boom   |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky....you go girl!!!  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen... This was actually written over a period of time, since you gave me the challenge... and then?... I just had to be in the right (or wrong) mood to post it... Glad you like it... Thank you... Thank you, Martie... "When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." --Jimi Hendrix |
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Jeep Monkey Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 96Chaos |
Oh, I really REALLY like this. "How dare you deny me the privilege of seeing your eyes as I hate you with so much disgust"......love love LOVE this. Been there. Enjoyed that. In my now-freedom, I love it still. JM |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 wow, you really cut loose! feelin better now? |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Thanks, Jeep Monkey... Glad you like it... and Kacy?... unfortunately, 'cutting loose' of this sort never really feels good to me... at least, not for long... so, in answer to your question?... not really... but thank you... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
*library* for when I'm in just such a mood. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"unfortunately, 'cutting loose' of this sort never really feels good to me... at least, not for long..." Having read from start to end, I find the above worthy of being highlighted because I think you know that the "cutting loose" ... has damaged your soul (that's just the poet in me but, yes, something like that). Good vent though and I hope for a speedy recovery! Helen |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
GOD does this EVER scream! "You should know you caused this hatred birthed this baby of contempt with all your wanting wicked lies in truth's disguise and I believed..." AMAZING! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yes...so nicely concluded... "and, one more thing before you go... I loved you... Did you know?" I really like that. Eric |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*nodding* uh huh. Nice, very nice vent. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"and, one more thing before you go... I loved you... Did you know?" This part aches..."ouch..." However..Always good to read you  hugs, g "A tiger who does not prowl becomes a rug..." ;) |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
This is sooo good. I also loved your ending lines. best to you, martyjo |
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