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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2005-12-20 06:56 PM

Sands fall upon the heaviness of one’s heart
as waters flow the meandering stream of
wisdom. Washing thoughts from the grasp
of fingers, swirling into nothingness...gone

If love were but a butterfly, so delicate and
fine, would love be found within the grasp
of a weathered hand?

If love were but the vase falling into shards,
could pieces again be molded into the
passion once endured and felt?

From the sands ebb an echo is born as a
sigh is given flight into the cold hard stones,
stroked lightly by a moment of exclamation....
Felt longingly by the pause of one beat amongst
the reeds of life where waters dwell and dry
into the earth....gracefully lost as is the touch
of softness upon a waking brow.

[This message has been edited by Magnus (12-20-2005 07:37 PM).]

Sharksbean
Member

since 2005-09-25

Posts 368
jax

1 posted 2005-12-20 07:08 PM

Felt longingly by the pause of one beat amongst
the reeds of life where waters dwell and dry
into the earth....gracefully lost as is the touch
of softness upon a waking brow.
cherish....as one would their own.

simply breathtaking

-may the force be with you in poetry

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2005-12-20 08:05 PM

Melancholy at it's finest, for you paint the heart in beats upon the page.
TD

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2005-12-20 09:05 PM

Barry,
A touch of fantasia, well done.

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2005-12-21 02:12 PM

Would we have such a beautiful work of art if we didn't have heaviness of heart? Thank you for the meander through the mists, Magnus.

- Owl

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2005-12-21 02:40 PM

Barry, I am moved by all the moods and emotions that you so eloquently express through your poetry.

Warm hug,
Linda

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2005-12-21 03:07 PM

To the q's...

Yes.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2005-12-28 09:23 AM

This.... is absolutely lovely... in every way.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2005-12-28 09:27 AM

"If love were but a butterfly, so delicate and
fine, would love be found within the grasp
of a weathered hand?"

It is usually the weathered hand that knows best how to be gentle..

wonderful Barry!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

9 posted 2005-12-28 03:35 PM

Wonderful!

Eric

bgj
Member

since 2005-11-09

Posts 128
Ga. USA

10 posted 2005-12-28 03:41 PM

Another great write sir, enjoyed it much.
bgj

Summerbreeze
New Member

since 2005-12-23

Posts 2

11 posted 2005-12-28 05:41 PM

Sands fall upon the heaviness of one’s heart
as waters flow the meandering stream of
wisdom.

Excellent- in this and in its entirety.

Thank you - SB

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

12 posted 2005-12-28 05:56 PM

Barry

"If love were but a butterfly, so delicate and
fine, would love be found within the grasp
of a weathered hand?"

Oh yes, it would be found there and anywhere. Loved your poem, my friend!

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

13 posted 2005-12-28 06:59 PM

Quite nicely done, Magnus.

Excellent metaphor and imagery.

CB 8)

"Only the dead, have seen the end of war."
Plato

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