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My Parting Gift
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My Parting Gift |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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I hope I don't lose any (or too many) of my new-found friends over this poem. My Parting Gift September 1999 You low-level, scheming, sub-human three-timing scum of the earth, you should be removed from society, yet you wander free, an unstable toddler with a gun and shooting skills and a self-confessed principle of only shooting to kill, you cowardly psychopathic, ticking time bomb. You make the same crazy, sweeping statements and repeat the same stupid stories and the same ridiculous theories formulated to suit yourself, to the same list of people, ad ad ad infinitum, with the same words, commas and paragraphs, exclamations and sound effects at the same boring places. Your only interest is you, but you are not interesting. When I persuaded you to leave your gun behind you agreed, but told me not to expect you to protect me if anyone should attack me. You cringe at everything. You are a cowardly blob who would never consider saving a diving buddy - “Why should you risk your life for someone you have only just met, you say? And so what!” you say, “if over 13 000 Turks die in a single earthquake. They would have died at some stage anyway,” you say. You are a wimpish, fifty-four year old basket-case who wouldn’t know a single scruple if it wore a label with large clear print around its neck and introduced itself to you. You have no emotions and inspire none. As everybody else feels about you, I don’t love you, like you, respect you, trust you, notice you, remember you. You are so easy and quick to forget, like the silly, boring string of photocopied enlargements of silly, boring aeroplanes on your wall at the top of your stairs. I should know. I’ve forgotten you often enough and fast enough. You are a white-haired old-man-baby, a megalomaniac who surrounds himself with self-images and has learnt nothing more than Mommy taught him and all she taught you is that her darling son is always right; the world is harsh and cruel to you and always wrong, and isn’t it fun to walk all over people shamelessly and use them as and when you need to, and then tell horror stories about them to everyone you know, and doesn’t it give you a rush to lie and scheme and be evasive and when nobody bothers to challenge your lies, isn’t it fun to be so stupid as to think they believe you and that you have got away with it, and when anyone does take the trouble to confront you about one of your lies, you attack with indignation and more lies and badly feigned assurances of honesty or astonishing toddler tantrums. But ha! ha! ha! Wasn’t it fun for me when you fell into your own trap. Fun and funny, and the tornado devastation that tried to crush me when I realised that you, my worst enemy, could go so low, brought cathartic closure to a farce of a relationship with a raving lunatic. You schizophrenic robot What a pity that none of your personalities have any personality and what a pity that I could only tell you that most of the time with you I was angry or miserable. What a pity that I couldn’t bring myself to tell you also that all the time I was bored. - Owl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling here? Well you didn't lose this fan, Owl. I not only love the release of reading a great rant, I like to write 'em too. Grab 'em by the throat and make 'em look, I always say. Enjoyed.  |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
i think i saw you mention this in another one of your poems or in a reply to the poems in your thread, and hoped you'd post it. SO glad you did. I think, you just may GAIN friends from this. I once sent a 'man' i knew a poem titled 'a parting gift', maybe i'll dig it up to post. Yes, tho a difference of 25 years in age, they seem very much the same man! Loved every minute of reading this, and will do again. Thankyou again, for the beautiful reality brought to life, of a nearing inhuman person. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Phewwwwww!!!! Thank goodness for that! Thankkkkkkk you, Serenity Blaze. I must say I am very relieved to hear it. I was very nervous about posting this. Glad you liked it - and glad you write them too! Beeeeeg smiles to you. - Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks for the encouragement too, gemjop. Not too sure about the gaining friends with this explosion, but perhaps you are right! I'd love to read your "parting gift". Thanks for enjoying reading my poem and for planning to re-read it. I have a couple of other poems about him and his reaction to national disasters, that I may post some time. I also have a suite of short poems that I wrote to him before I "knew"! - Owl |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A powerful purge of a write here!!! So much enjoyed dear Owl. What an amazing talent you have. Hugs~Nancy ~Let peace begin with me... |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
interesting |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yea very interesting. i know one like that too My spirit will rise |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I could have sworn that I replied to Enchantress and Juju (before McGrove answered), but perhaps it went in, but isn't appearing to me yet (that seems to happen often), and perhaps my phone voucher died while I was replying. So forgive me if this is a repeat: Thank you Enchantress, Juju and McGroves. Yes, a real purging vent - same guy as the one in Friday the 13th Horror! Sorry to hear you know somebody like this, McGrove and that he is not unique! - Owl |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
sadly alot of us know/knew people like this. and i second karen's thought, an untamed rant only endears you to me grins |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Beautiful piece of work! (clapping) I love poetry that gets me involved in the subject. You are a very ardent writer Owl. It was fierce, passionate and well written. I hope to see more poems like this from you. Poetic genius, Owl. Great write. - Ed Grim |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks, Aenimal. Grins, with a happy little giggle. Sorry that you (I think) know somebody like this. Thanks Ed (Grim - Ratleader is also an Ed). Grins to you too. This is my only hate poem, as far as I can remember - though I have quite a bit of venting stuff. Yes, I am an ardent writer - probably all my writing is passionate, a lot of it is fierce, especially depending on how one defines "fierce". I'm very honoured at how you describe my poetry. I like yours too. - Owl |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Dang, now that is writing . . . I must admit, in a couple places it made me smile only because the way you put into words so many different emotional disorders in one single sentence, its astounding. Am sorry you knew one like this, I think we all have, but you would never lose one over this, are ya crazy? *laughing* Nodding with Lady K. (I am so spoiled with the stories) Felt this spittle on my face from here. *grin* |
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Jeep Monkey Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 96Chaos |
Now - there is Passion in this. Wow! I read it, and felt fiestier and more authoritative after it. What a moving piece. I felt myself reading faster and faster to a great ending, and feeling of satisfaction. Job well done! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks littlewing! Glad I didn't lose any friends over this psychopath (well, that I know of, anyway, LOL)! Thanks Jeep Monkey (love your nom de plume and would love to know what kind of monkey a Jeep monkey is!). Glad it helped! Yep, it gave me a feeling of satisfaction too, so much so that he became completely unimportant to me, so cathartic was the experience of writing the poem - although I would imagine that the total effect wasn't immediate - it was some time ago, as you will see from the date, that I can't rememeber how long it took. - Owl |
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