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Open Poetry #36

What Star

DennisTheMenace
Member

since 2005-09-04

Posts 240

0 posted 2005-12-13 06:41 PM

I could use a star
To guide my way
It should be a bright star
Shining both night and day
It should take me somewhere
Where I can learn to be a better soul
I think I would follow it anywhere
And give it all my hard earned gold
Or frankincense or mer (whatever that is)
But didn’t that star already shine?
Showing us what was his,
The heaven maker throwing us a line.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2005-12-13 06:43 PM

try myrrh
nicely written piece
Peace to you!

DennisTheMenace
Member

since 2005-09-04

Posts 240

2 posted 2005-12-13 06:46 PM

Thank U
didn't no jow 2 spell that, not that speelin is my strong suit. Fact is I'm still looking for my strong suit. Probably ain't poetry either, but glad for the support n any way given (specially @ seplling)

loveofcalvary
New Member

since 2005-12-13

Posts 3

3 posted 2005-12-13 07:17 PM

That really was nicely done-- I especially liked the last few lines. Keep up the work and you'll fine your strong suit comes much easier than you'd thought...

DennisTheMenace
Member

since 2005-09-04

Posts 240

4 posted 2005-12-13 10:57 PM

I hope so horsey-lovin'-person, I'm already a jr and still wavin n da breeze

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