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MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21

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In a corporeal internship...

0 posted 2005-07-17 09:05 AM

The Eraser And The Pencil

Copyright 2005 by: Mark V Sheldon

The eraser moves faster than the pencil lately
Merging lead to gray absence
Blowing away curling remnants of
A thousand words
Drawing us apart
As your fine outline fades
Smearing the details of
The big picture
While a new page
Waits its turn…

You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml

Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2005-07-17 10:00 AM

MARK,
A Mark unique.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

2 posted 2005-07-17 10:23 AM

well, my lead is too weighted...
can barely lift it to leave a mark

M

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

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3 posted 2005-07-17 10:40 AM

Great comparison. Well done. Joyce

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2005-07-17 10:53 AM

An excellent write Mark!
So much enjoyed.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

vandana

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5 posted 2005-07-17 10:59 AM

good read

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2005-07-17 12:36 PM

Merging lead to gray absence
Blowing away curling remnants of
A thousand words
Drawing us apart
As your fine outline fades

hey there Mark... hows it going

I see you still write with your signature style of saying so much with just the right amount of verbiage. *S*
( a lesson my long winded muse still needs to learn)

I love this write...its one of those that makes me wish I had wrote it..
loved your clever theme and analogies.
good to read you again poet sir.

Thank you clarity ... thank you frailty
Thank you consequence ...
Thank you ... thank you silence ...

Alanis

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

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OH

7 posted 2005-07-17 12:40 PM

Well, I'm impressed; whether the lead works or not, you certainly can write/type a great poem! Still, I'm hoping the eraser will soon tire and accept the words as written.

miscellanea

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2005-07-17 12:42 PM

You have such a great way of painting a vast feeling, with so few words. Excellent, Mark! Thank you!

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

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9 posted 2005-07-17 01:36 PM

Ah...this is so beautiful and telling....I love it when life heals enough to give us a new page to fill with the beauty of words and feelings yet to be written....Your words tell it just right....may the new pages open visions that will fill your soul with inspiration and your heart with all it desires....**big hugs***

Pilgrimage
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10 posted 2005-07-17 02:06 PM

Excellent way to phrase this. And I like the way despair becomes hope at the very end.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

passing shadows
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11 posted 2005-07-17 07:26 PM

awesome write

LeeJ
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12 posted 2005-07-18 09:02 AM

magnificent outlook....

MARK V SHELDON
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In a corporeal internship...

13 posted 2005-07-18 10:13 AM

Seymour, that's the attempt. Thank you.

Maureen: ...then stay a while...

Thank you kindly, Joyce.

Nancy, I am pleased -- thank you much.

Hi Vandana -- and thank you. Love your

Hey there Janet...  a VERY long time -- no read!  Great hearing from you, and an honor receiving such praise from you.  I am happily humbled.

miscellanea:  The eraser never stops and gains momentum at times...  You speak wisdom regarding acceptance, however...  Thank you much for your kind words.

Sunshine, your rays of praise feel great.  Thank you for shining on this little poem.

Startime55:  you are very kind, and I thank you.  Indeed, it's a balance between the the story written and the new page awaiting its turn...

Pilgrimage:  What would the story be if not for the happy ending? (an all too common tale, I suppose...)  Thank you for your read and thoughts.

Dixie:  i am most grateful.

LeeJ:  Perspectives are reached when the lessons are understood.  Thank you for your consistant support -- it is very much appreciated.

-MVS

You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml

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