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Ace33
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0 posted 2005-12-11 12:19 PM


who put dat smile on ya face wiped tears 4rm ya eye

did everything you asked and neva asked why

it is I the one who used to be yo only

but since you left i've been so lonely

everything i do remindin me of you

thought what we had was real and true

i found out i was wrong

and before long you was gone

then my caller I.d stopped sayin ya name

now i can't get things back the same

constantly hangin up on me

what is it that i do not see

lets put an end to all this

cuz you know i'm the one you miss

jus give me one wish

i'm askin for you kiss

and if you feel a spark

on yo heart know its me leavin my mark


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with you
1 posted 2005-12-11 05:12 PM


I really like this, it would flow so much better though if you spelled the words out. Just my opinion....
majnu
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2 posted 2005-12-11 05:51 PM


is this supposed to be in english?

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

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