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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Game (Revised/shortened) You can’t tell the doe not to go into the woods even now in season with man-stink in the air; no unseen force will cause her to change her course or once begun, to run from the familiar. [This message has been edited by Corinne (12-09-2005 11:47 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
nothing but will will be done. ~*~ The will of the hunter, this year, is good...because their numbers have become so great, that they are a danger not only to themselves, in the worst of ways, but to man, as well. As long as beauty gives itself to nurture...I have no problem with the hunter. But to inconsiderate hunters? Watch out...  A beautiful, haunting write, Corinne... K . |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow Corinne This is heart wrenchingly exquisite. I'm sending this on to a friend, too.  thank youYou just summed up something for me, that I didn't even know I was thinking, if that makes sense... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Corinne? I loved this so much that I sent it as a card. I thought I'd tell you that, and thank you again. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
murder is intrinsically human. to justify it we rename it sport, defense, operation(pick recent war/police action from the last few decades) simply in awe of your work. you're writing is always tight and focussed, speaking volumes with few words and yet you always manage powerful/beautiful imagery as well buy this car to drive to work, drive to work to pay for this car..lalalalala |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gosh, I saw so much here. The doe attempting to outsmart her fate and a young lover . . . carrying his maiden. nothing but will will be done. as is life . . . beautiful. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi Karilea, actually, this one is the metaphorical hunter/hunted rather than literal. But it certainly can be taken at face value, as poems mean different things to different people. I just had to get this poem out because I find it so difficult to understand why women (and I suppose men as well) can reach a point where they have such little self-esteem that they continue to endure abuse even when an out is presented. Serenity - wow, how cool, thank you! I'd be curious to know how that was received! Aenimal, thank you so much. Very kind of you to say. I'm also a big fan of your work! and I like that new b/w picture of you, too, face partially hidden beneath the blankets like the last thing you want is to have your picture taken!  I need to do something about my old horrid pic one of these days. Thanks littlewing! Corinne |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Corine, Favoring the metaphorical myself, I understood your meaning and was ready to dislike your poem, expecting another male bashing club, but it surprized me turning into a poem about will, wish, hope, compelling over reason. "Buck" then would have been as appropriate as "doe". It's a very good poem. So much, I'd like to include it in my file of poems by others with your permission. John |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Corinne, I cannot stand the thought of hunting deer -- ever since I saw "Bambi" as a child. This brought back a scene to mind from that movie...I always cry. I know hunting is necessary to keep the creature population under control, but I would much rather it not be the GAME. Great write. ......jo |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
John, certainly, I'd be honored, thank you! iliana, thank you! Corinne |
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