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Open Poetry #36

good-bye my friend

Copperbell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

0 posted 2005-12-03 03:31 AM

Wander through the pass of time
your broken heart, and longings mine

I recall your chestnut curls
Your father’s riches
The hateful’s words

I loved you once

But not the way you wished for me

I saw you flinch

But not the change I thought there’d be

I lived your past my gorgeous friend
Your seventeen
My bitter end

Somewhere in your little car
A friendship bloomed
But not so far

To reach today
to wind our lives
no, its time to say

good bye

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2005-12-03 10:27 AM

CB
I love how this reads...it flows so nicely off the tongue...And like potato chips-
I could not eat just one,
And so I read again...this time not for form
But content...

There is a bit of mystery here, and that can be a good thing...

But my mind is one that prys, and so I must ask what this stanza means..hope you don't mind..

"I lived your past my gorgeous friend
Your seventeen
My bitter end"

Enjoyed
------------ice
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Copperbell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

2 posted 2005-12-03 11:38 AM

Thank you Ice --- this is about an old friend I saw recently

I lived your past my gorgeous friend
Your seventeen
My bitter end

I lived through his childhood years with him - I saw him seventeen - at the same time I experienced a messy break up with a boyfriend

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2005-12-03 02:38 PM

Excellent write...very much enjoyed the read!
Hugs~Nancy

~Let peace begin with me...

Copperbell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

4 posted 2005-12-04 08:08 PM

Thanks Enchantress!!

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