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LeeJ
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0 posted 2005-11-30 01:44 PM


mind visions bejewelled

pushing a red neon sunset
through a jukebox door
with an oval shaped
mirrored light, of playful
behind the darkness of some
intense gaze of higher plains

shaking off, the pulled up knees of
biohazards, moving around me
like an aura of worlds with
some half seen secret on duty
where the sea ends and grey begins

i’m a long term gal open & lost
on some sensuously green beyond now
hearing the shenanigans of
electromagnetic awareness
cascading
off two golden rules, gulping the lush
body of earth’s soul
wondering where the remaining pieces go?
do they rock beneath the breath of man?

and the pulse seems to echo
beating, throbbing, lost in an eternity
of rock waterfalls
becoming likewise part of this space
on all fours, sinking my teeth into
profound sight, internal arcs of visions
flickering from side to side

afterbirth dreams at the drinking pool of sound
plump with popping ears and mouth
people ooze a pulse to the fingertips of years
reality becomes winged compassion
intellects, surround sound, in the naked
core of enormous reflections..interacting
within the remains of some planet

my hands dance with karmic wirings
loosing the weight of body in
semi-consciousness, that feeds real truth
even if in places,
where one is least likely to look

i want the beginning
i’m desperately in need of
away from the overwhelming ugly people
clawing my way into some sacred shrine
in that bubbling pool of warm crevices
crossing over into ancient forests

and it is there
i shall continue to fly
staying out in front of the planet
trying to balance the fresh growth of
man’s chatter and human smell

there i sit, stripping my cloths off
at the bottom of my mind
swimming with a wicked grin
i succumb
among the embrace of living droplets
where the endless questions go
into idealistic form
and wrinkles disappear


© Copyright 2005 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2005-11-30 01:53 PM


"my hands dance with karmic wirings
loosing the weight of body in
semi-consciousness, that feeds real truth
even if in places,
where one is least likely to look"

WOW!!  Once again you leave me speechless !
Love ya lady~

~ Trace my body with your words..
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~

suthern
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2 posted 2005-11-30 02:04 PM


i want the beginning
i’m desperately in need of
away from the overwhelming ugly people

Hey... You trying to avoid me now? LOL

Seriously, my friend... I've missed reading you... and enjoyed every line of this!

Martie
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3 posted 2005-11-30 03:04 PM


Hi LeeJ

It really is hard to know how to reply to your wealth of words.  How about a wow?  Wow!  and a hug?  

Misty Lilacs
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White Birch Forest
4 posted 2005-11-30 03:09 PM


You are an incredible poetess. I don't always understand your words, but I read them over and over and hope something will sink in this pea brain on mine.
Kethry
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5 posted 2005-11-30 03:20 PM


Although this poem has incredible imagery, I find myself squinting as the meaning almost coagulates into sense.  Still even without fully understanding I enjoyed this.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2005-11-30 03:26 PM


LeeJ
Feel the same way.

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2005-11-30 04:45 PM


there i sit, stripping my cloths off
at the bottom of my mind
swimming with a wicked grin
i succumb
among the embrace of living droplets
where the endless questions go
into idealistic form
and wrinkles disappear


yep lady, understand this....

dontcha just love losing the wrinkles??  

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
8 posted 2005-11-30 11:03 PM


"there i sit, stripping my cloths off
at the bottom of my mind
swimming with a wicked grin
i succumb"

Don't we all?

Always great to read you...

iliana
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Posts 13434
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9 posted 2005-12-01 12:28 PM


"my hands dance with karmic wirings
loosing the weight of body in
semi-consciousness, that feeds real truth
even if in places,
where one is least likely to look"

LeeJ, this is familiar to me.....you said it so well.  Also, the last verse, WOW!   ....jo

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2005-12-01 02:29 PM


My gosh lady, you make me dizzy sometimes!

(I mean that in a good way, too.)

Reading you is like bungee jumping through glitter and silk streamers...

I can barely think that fast, and you capture it, and portray it beautifully.

garysgirl
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11 posted 2005-12-01 03:23 PM


mind visions bejewelled

pushing a red neon sunset
through a jukebox door
with an oval shaped
mirrored light, of playful
behind the darkness of some
intense gaze of higher plains


I love this, Lee. Your descriptions are so vivid.
I wish I could write more like you.
Hugs,
Ethel

Elizabeth Santos
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Pennsylvania
12 posted 2005-12-01 03:37 PM



LeeJ,

You have a rich storehouse of descriptive images unlike anyone I know. May your words continue to amaze

Love you dear
Liz

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2005-12-01 06:11 PM


Enjoyed...James
Magnus
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14 posted 2005-12-01 06:20 PM


Liz said it perfectly..for you do have that
place of so many words...

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