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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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As if frightened From in a forest For the distance is so great Between us in others’ eyes Here where even in winter The sun will shine And mitigate the cold Where what I am Is as far from you As day from night And yet at dusk and dawn Before the two Then go alone Along their separate ways I can feel the dream However crude Of us together At each other’s side |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Bravo! There it is, the connection of life forms that I know exists...in the end walking as one... "Before the two Then go alone Along their separate ways I can feel the dream However crude Of us together At each other’s side" enjoyed ------------ice ><> |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes... This is most definitely a keeper... and library worthy...  "There's a reason they call God The Creator - he sides with talent." Julia Cameron |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
John~ 'As if frightened From in a forest For the distance is so great Between us in others’ eyes' I found this opening to be a most ponderous thought~ I needed something to reflect on this day ... thank you~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
absolutely..  brava! live for today, |
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SoundWaves Member
since 2005-06-22
Posts 113Center Stage |
Good write! The spotlight can only get brighter. |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Well done, John. It’s true, the boundary between man and beasts seems to fade and blend at dusk and dawn. Daytime is man’s reign; night time belongs to the creatures of the dark - but at dusk or dawn the black and white fade into a blended gray; a brief time when a strange kinship exists among the creatures of the Earth. I feel it each time, sitting motionless by a pond or a lake, observing the life around me, as the sun disappears below the horizon and darkness slowly descends. But along with the darkness comes the hard realization of man’s true disconnection from Nature - we are but visitors now, clutching to the crutches of civilization and technology. With a deep sigh, we climb into our SUV, and let the GPS guide us “home”. P.S. I have neither SUV, nor GPS.....am I lost? CG |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
She was as graceful as the sway of pond moss Quiet as dusk falling across the canyon Her breath moved the yellow wall of mustard She was covered with shivered listening Not only the grass sighed when she was gone |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I don't have the eloquence to tell you how much I love this. I think (difficult to think, all at once, of all the poems of yours that I have read)that this is my favourite of yours - I am almost sure that I love it even more than Bar Harbor. Thank you for the beautiful moments that you give me. CastleGuard and Martie, I also enjoyed your responses immensely. - Owl |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
A great poet always has more than enough words between every single blinks. love this one. |
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