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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Nest I would cry if I could; the very moisture of me is stolen until only crystal salt will come to seed my eyes. It is a cowbird spring, a spring that mocks the birds for eggs shoved out, for tiny shells all scattered in the wet sweet clover. There is no song in me but the song of taken, this gray thing that fouls the nest I built once stick by twig, and lined with down from near my heart. Where the hatchlings all a’ tremble? They are lost, the two of them as something else was lost, more than the time of every day; the sky going naked of the sun and cold splashed now with stars I half imagine underneath their lavender haze. When is the time? Now, someone said; let it be, someone said, if you will, someone said, but where, where did the hatchlings fly? Reality is flint, it splits me deep until I am made of splintered glass and salt, salt and two tiny round shells nearly hidden by the blooms of clover, shells and two small cries drowned hapless by the thundering bees. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (07-15-2005 11:32 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Melancholy at its best. I think you need a hug.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
OMG... Truly, truly... one of your best tear-jerkers ever... and where was the hanky alert, m'friend? Indeed, where did you leave that alert as you wandered aimlessly, looking... hurting... Jo said it - you need a |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sigh...Ed...I have one for you too. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Reality is flint, it splits me deep until I am made of splintered glass and salt, salt and two tiny round shells nearly hidden by the blooms of clover, shells and two small cries drowned hapless by the thundering bees. Oh, goodness... I agree with Sunshine... this is one of your best... and since you only write excellence, that's saying a lot!! Vivid images leave lasting impact... and yes... a desire to give you a hug, even knowing that won't make things better... so... |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Empty nest syndrome? Oh how you write. This is precious. You know the birds so well, and know life too. Thank you for this one. best martyjo |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (; |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
EdRat Dude This is a Very Very strong write, m'friend As good as any |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I did the best I could, but it wasn’t enough. I wish it had been, but I’m afraid I failed rather miserably. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
No failure, my friend. One of my birdies is flying now, even though I hoped she'd stay around a little longer. I believe she is a little prettier now, seeing the positive and negative spaces on her own. I could only hope to tell her of colors, but now brilliance is hers to find, from which to shield her eyes "sometimes", but hers to find! Guess I'm going to have to build another shelf in my library. Yours is becoming quite crowded! miscellanea |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Emotions conveyed very well here. Excellent write Ed. TD |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Ed Hope you can hear the applause that is coming from Pennsylvania, it is mine, and also the foot stomping.... This amazing poem deserves it and more... ------------ice ><> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sad Ed, yet strong. One of your best. mxx take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
For you to consider a write such as this a failure leaves me torn. On the one hand... I'd never wish you anguish of any kind. On the other hand... I wanna steal your pen so maybe... perhaps... if the pen is as magical in my hand as yours, I'll be capable of such magnificent "failures"... *G* |
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