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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2005-11-22 07:45 AM


Winds

The winds that coils my mind today
Are memory whorls of yesterday?
Tearing at the rigging ties
Some cut deep, those of lies

Those that range in twisted state
Those I fixed to change to sate
Those in shadows cast in brine
Those I thought were out of line

Memories change I’m sure you know
Those of deep and shallow flow
All are subject pressure points
All arthritis to our joints

But in the wear and tear of grime
All is evened out with time
So does it matter after all?
How or what the end of call

Forgive me if I tease our pride
What is there to really hide?


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dapyun
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1 posted 2005-11-22 07:47 AM


great poem. i have no words to give you as critique. i just loved it.
scorpio
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2 posted 2005-11-22 07:48 AM


Sy it's not what you hide but what you reveal to us in your words.  Well done.

believe in what your heart feels...

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2005-11-22 08:14 AM


dapyun
Thank you for the read and comment.

scorpio
Love your reply, thank you.

Sunshine
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4 posted 2005-11-22 08:25 AM



If more listened
to the idea that
we cannot hide anything...

it would be
a better world...







.

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2005-11-22 08:45 AM


Sunshine
I don't know why but it takes a long time to learn.

MGROVES
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6 posted 2005-12-11 11:40 PM


life is one hard long lesson to learn, but most instead of learning from mistakes from past, and making better, just carry down the same way of thinking, and it does not bring peace nor happiness

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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7 posted 2005-12-12 03:49 AM


Seymour, another perfect rhyme of reason.
Thank you for your wonderful wisdom that you
share with us.
Hugs,
Ethel

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2005-12-12 05:17 PM


MGROVES
You are so right.

Ethel
Thank you for being you.

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