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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-11-13 04:05 PM

Six over the sycamore
fly away fly away,

blue mountain grows
from the side pocket
of the speechless stream,

make mine a double
no twist,

leaf littered floors
and i'm dancing solo,

the clouds hijacked
my shadow,

sunday sonata
in silence,
just the crinkle crinkle
as they tease me,

my fingers playing catch
but nothing sticks today.....

26 circles round the old oak;

should I stay or should i go?

(raking the leaves of indecision)

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (11-13-2005 07:36 PM).]

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

1 posted 2005-11-13 04:20 PM

And the leaves say
From where they lay
Just don’t wait
Until it’s over

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

2 posted 2005-11-13 04:21 PM

I like this. I'm still catching up with a line or two, but then it's Autumn. Nice. Bob

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

3 posted 2005-11-13 08:11 PM

If it were me, I would just let the leaves blow.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2005-11-13 08:25 PM

Love this one Michele..
It was very windy here today...
and I watched as the leaves danced freely down the street.
Hugs~Nancy

Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again...and again...

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2005-11-13 08:27 PM

*am keeping this one*

pictureme2
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 194

6 posted 2005-11-13 11:17 PM

I loved the ending line! Thanks for the read! Let the leaves dance freely!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2005-11-18 01:49 PM

quote:
blue mountain grows
from the side pocket
of the speechless stream,

Delightful write, dear Michele!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2005-11-18 04:35 PM

Oh man, er lady... this is a

m xx

how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more
~Neruda~

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

9 posted 2005-11-18 11:58 PM

As long as we keep raking, we don't have to decide anything. Nice metaphor, I enjoyed this. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

10 posted 2005-11-22 02:14 AM

I'm going to have to agree with M..KEEPER.

dapyun
Junior Member

since 2005-11-22

Posts 11

11 posted 2005-11-22 05:51 AM

your metaphors are great.
i loved this, sincerely

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