»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #36
»
Luna, impatient
| Open Poetry #36 |
|
Luna, impatient |
|
|
wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
|
Tonight, Luna is full of herself, nervous and impatient Trying to get my attention by throwing a fortune in silver onto the walls Skipping her coins up through the window bounced from the water in the river below But, I’m tired And not in the mood for mercurial messages or ethereal moments She’ll have to dance her Bolero without me Let Uranus keep her tonight My own madness is suited to a dance, less frenetic |
||
| © Copyright 2005 E.F.Rose - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
oh my, wranx.....oh my... love this ! **baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
||
Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now you realize the ladies will all have to answer THAT right  Lovely though, but look out for feedback you!Bolero madness skirted in flirted winks etch silver through wooded stillness awakening all that surrounds to dance in desire. (Except Wranx) LOL, don't know what that it, but it came to mind when I read your beautiful poem. |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Trying to get my attention by throwing a fortune in silver onto the walls Skipping her coins up through the window bounced from the water in the river below" AND THEN... "And not in the mood for mercurial messages or ethereal moments She’ll have to dance her Bolero without me Let Uranus keep her tonight My own madness is suited to a dance, less frenetic" Dang!!! I love this! If I had to choose a favourite part I could repeat the entire piece line for line word for word.. My favourite from you!! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
||
|
LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
In places of foliage Wet with rustling We will dance with violin voice But like a first heart break Missing you Missing you Missing you And your merciless moods leaving questions During this silver twilight When interlude stars are shimmering Like a moon child smiling I hope this desire of yours to write, never passes...amazing the way you articulate |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A waltz...then...  Liking this very much, Ed! |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tonight, Luna is full of herself, nervous and impatient Trying to get my attention by throwing a fortune in silver onto the walls Skipping her coins up through the window bounced from the water in the river below But, I’m tired And not in the mood for mercurial messages or ethereal moments ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ OH MAN!!! I wish I had wrote this.... outstanding personification and imagery.. very very cool write poet sir... Trying to get my attention by throwing a fortune in silver onto the walls Skipping her coins up through the window bounced from the water in the river below those images are poetic gold!! Thank you clarity ... thank you frailty |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Luna drives some of us to lunacy. But you? she drives to brilliancy. Loved this write! |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know how ya feel |
||
|
latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Wranx~~ Such wonderful writing. Great flow and choice of words. best to you, martyjo |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
nodding here I have been wondering what's got her so moody of late too. sighing I'm enjoying the clouds of late.  *crawling back to my cave* |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx The truth is, sometimes you just feel that way. Enjoyed |
||
|
MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Good to read you again -- your words are just as I last remember them: vivid, honest, and thought-provoking. What more could one ask for (except maybe a publishing deal...?) -MVS You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml |
||
|
latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
HI,SNEAKING BACK TO BANK THIS .THANKS AGAIN. |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Wranx, this is poetry at its best! Loved it! .....jo |
||
|
Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I like this, Ed. I do believe I've been properly inspired... ~tier  |
||
|
she'll_be_apples Junior Member
since 2005-07-11
Posts 22 |
she seems diligent, that in latin = "diligo" which = "love" according to the Oxford Very impressive. |
||
|
MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
enjoyed My spirit will rise |
||
|
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
and this is only one reason I hold you in my heart. The most brilliant mind I have met, Eddie. How you twist words - their hands bent high above their backs . . . My sentiments, precisely. |
||
|
Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
brava Ed. |
||
|
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely stunning work Ed..you've floored me...WOW! a  mxx take bread away from me, if you wish, take air away. but do not take from me your laughter. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
