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Thoughts While Staring at the Deck
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Thoughts While Staring at the Deck |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thoughts While Staring at the Deck Autumn, with its promiscuous weather, leaves the deck both light and dark. The dry part under the eaves resembles a man's hands, not those of an office worker, but calloused, as if familiar with slaving in fields. Curiously, the stained wood seems at liberty, here it sheens, there it smoothes as when a dark woman allows her slip to pool upon the carpet. The rain does things. It changes moods. As I sit rocking indoors I think about the puddles and how they fill the eyes. RMW |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You have a great imagination, Bob...what happens when the wet and dry come together? Maybe lightning! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
OH, that dark woman and her slip pooling on the floor! Evocative image. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
whoohoo, but I love this, a dramatic black and white portrait.....done in palette knife to intensify and highlight those puddles on stained wood.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"The rain does things. It changes moods. As I sit rocking indoors I think about the puddles and how they fill the eyes." Love it...absolutely love it!!!!!!!  Hugs~Nancy Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I enjoyed this, rather unusual poem. Very vivid and imaginative. Never woulda thought... Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Much enjoyed the analogies and great writing here, RMW. |
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PoetessFlamme Junior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 20France |
You have a way with words, great talent! |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Excellent!!! My favorite lines that brings this poem together are Autumn, with its promiscuous weather, leaves the deck both light and dark. The dry part under the eaves resembles a man's hands, not those of an office worker, but calloused, as if familiar with slaving in fields Great Visuals... |
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