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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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Fields of night with legs extended danced a lunar juxtaposition at the top of its voice high grasses parted while moonlight grinned, evensong illuminations slowly undoing the gingered, red gold hair of fall… and i stood there amidst dripping handfuls of existence, heavy with attachment gorging on this ointment realizing, the slightest touch of nocturnal breeze on my cheek whispering the pull of my soul’s journey so filled up, like quietly watching your unaware child, catching his first fish or talking to his imaginary friend it was then, i remembered the corn kernel eyes of daughters whose mothers were true friends infectious as i drank this last part of abundance from summer’s final dew knowing fate was busy gathering an eastern horizon’s queue i saw all my dreams before me… beginning at every sunrise… as she slipped light on her naked shoulders like a gown i heard herbal cries of greatest achievements precarious at times, but never falling short, placing me, right in the middle of where i was theoretically supposed to be...in this blazing seaport listen closely...and you’ll hear omnipresence at work... with occasional words effortlessly cheering a nurturance of secrets that growing up forgot and this night, walked me out into the moonlight waking up all the past hours that had fell asleep a savy bookshelf with moving ambitious little feet and i drank these hearth fires wrapped tightly in an incarnation of brightly colored fruit lay strewn among round stones beginning a wedding dance guided by the rhythm of a harliquin flute pulling me with strong arms droplets of life’s glitter and for the first time feeling the weight of privilege & eternal inheritance |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"wrapped tightly in an incarnation of brightly colored fruit lay strewn among round stones beginning a wedding dance guided by the rhythm of a harliquin flute pulling me with strong arms droplets of life’s glitter and for the first time feeling the weight of privilege & eternal inheritance" WOW! X600... Lee J: Words cannot describe this beauty! Wonderful… JL  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh my!!!!!! LeeJ, I love this exquisite writing of yours and am saving it to bathe in when I feel blue. Beautiful, just beautiful!  .....jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
My gosh Lee--I don't understand why there is a lack of reply here. Again, you bring out the thief in me as there are so many, very vivid lines I would love to steal. You grow--m'lady. I love that you aren't afraid to travel deep.  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
listen closely...and you’ll hear omnipresence at work... with occasional words effortlessly cheering a nurturance of secrets that growing up forgot Your writings are so amazing. If only I could learn how.... hugs, Chris |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"realizing, the slightest touch of nocturnal breeze on my cheek whispering the pull of my soul’s journey" You are a Goddess!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I agree with the others, LeeJ....you touch me with the way you see and feel, every time! Especially this: "and i stood there amidst dripping handfuls of existence, heavy with attachment gorging on this ointment realizing, the slightest touch of nocturnal breeze on my cheek whispering the pull of my soul’s journey" An amazing journey it is!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 LEE!!! this absolutely rocks! I am keepin this one on my favorites shelf. You had me out there in those green grasses, bending with all of LIFE's twists and turns. Wow, what an OUTSTANDING write! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lee~ You continually astound us ... you do know that, don't you ? 'listen closely...and you’ll hear omnipresence at work... with occasional words effortlessly cheering a nurturance of secrets that growing up forgot and this night, walked me out into the moonlight waking up all the past hours that had fell asleep' Uh huh ! That's what I'm talking 'bout !! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
met·a·phor (mĕt'ə-fôr', -fər) n. A figure of speech in which a word or phrase that ordinarily designates one thing is used to designate another, thus making an implicit comparison, as in "THE wind was a torrent of darkness among the gusty trees, The moon was a ghostly galleon tossed upon cloudy seas, The road was a ribbon of moonlight over the purple moor, And the highwayman came riding— (Noyes) or "and i stood there amidst dripping handfuls of existence, heavy with attachment gorging on this ointment "wrapped tightly in an incarnation of brightly colored fruit lay strewn among round stones beginning a wedding dance guided by the rhythm of a harliquin flute" (LeeJ) You are a master of metaphorical art, and the world is better for it. Love the way you remold that world, when its surface form does not suffice in its original shape, only true romantics can do this this well... --------------ice ><> |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
YEP! As they all agree!! As you can see, and like I have said in the past: U-DA-BOMB!! I just had to come back to this one!! JL |
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bgj Member
since 2005-11-09
Posts 128Ga. USA |
Awesome poem. Hope I'm able to write like this some day. Lots of luck, bgj |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Geez, Lee! The first verse sucked me right in. Wonderful writing! |
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