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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2005-07-14 01:25 AM

A Passing of Hours

I think of how beautiful
you were to my eyes, my
heart just hours before.
I remember the sweet as
candy words you said to me
as you walked out the door.

How long it seems to be,
before you return to me.
I know its only a passing
of hours, but to me, it
seems like an eternity.

JamesLee
July14
2005

Elven Angel
Junior Member

since 2005-07-14

Posts 10

1 posted 2005-07-14 02:27 AM

wow..sweet.
Sounds like you really love the person.
nice bit of work indeed ^_^

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2005-07-14 06:22 AM

James
This poem reminds me of Romeos words to Juliet as they reluctantly parted,

*"Good night, good night! Parting is such sweet sorrow."

And the "candy word" reply that Juliet made....

* ".....that I shall say good night till it be morrow."
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A simple expression of your feelings on parting, yet it is very effective in the poem...

"I know its only a passing
of hours, but to me, it
seems like an eternity."

careful now, when you use the word "eternity"

Remeber what happened to Shakespears young lovers....

enjoyed
----------------ice
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MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

3 posted 2005-07-14 06:42 AM

surely have missed your words

very nice~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

SimplyGold
Senior Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

4 posted 2005-08-03 03:41 PM

Humm, this is reading like a novel now. Going back deeper to the beginning. Tell me if you see this where and when did this start?
The mystery is getting deeper. Back tracking could be forever..

SG

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2005-08-03 03:47 PM

This is beautiful.

Hugs

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

Bodger
Senior Member

since 2005-06-12

Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

6 posted 2005-08-03 07:23 PM

James

One day you will be candy wrapped and smiling

Bodger

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