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wrapped up in you.....
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 It’s been one of those days..... the house is too cold nothing good to watch on tv and I can’t shake the feeling that you’re here with me cause the memories keep playing in songs only I can hear and the clock keeps tick tocking ‘oh if only you were near’ these tears just won’t be held back guess I’m due a good cry I’d like to say that I don’t miss you oh but baby that would be a lie it’s been one of those days in retrospect subdue it’s been one of those days wrapped up in you..... ~SEA~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Oh I know those days Susan... I felt every word~~  hoping this day is "warmer" for you.M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
suesea it is good to see you this way...shows love and love is lovely in all forms enjoyed it lady |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I love not only this poem of yours, but also the feeling you describe...that lonely ache of love, the one that leaves you pondering in self exploration...the guessing, the ups and downs, and then, the surprise of his appearance, all of a sudden there he is, and that feeling inside of deep spiritual meaning, if only for a second, now that my dear lady, makes it all worthwhile, doesn't it. Tremendous write |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Sue...you write of 'ache' perfectly. Hugs~Nancy Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
in retrospect subdue ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Pssssssst.... guess what??? (IWIHWT!!!)   |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, You just can't write anything I don't really enjoy from many angles. But mostly your romantic soul keeps breathing life into me. I like that. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ah SEA, methinks that quite a few of us have had one or two of those "wrapped up" days. Wonderful write. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sue...lovely and elegant...with an almost old fashioned feel. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
yeah Sea just like that.....you define lovely here....  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
in retrospect subdue ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ There you have it!!! I gotta hand it to you, the quiet calm looks good on you, SEAgal~ Your poetry is so easy on the eyes~ |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you guys are so great  ...thank you very much for your kind words. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well lady, that was a quietly sensual write of lst class calibre. It suited you to a quilt - yes, it did! Don't you just love how Hanks draws pictures for us to put words to? I love that artist and I love your intrepretation of his work. Bee-ooot-tea-full (psst, I liked the same lines as Jan and Lauren by the way, WIHWT too. so there! |
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DennisTheMenace Member
since 2005-09-04
Posts 240 |
Wrapped up in U, Hey Suz, I won’t mind being ur sweater I’d keep u warm and might b amuzing 2 (better than TV) Love the poem, is that a pic of U???? |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Susan, Hello friend! So good to see you. Your writing is always beautiful and this one is no exception. I have missed you. I've had so much going on in my life, it's crazy. Will write you soon. Take care. Amy  "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You described those feelings perfectly. You expertly created the atmosphere of a mellow, bitter-sweet, reflective day that most of us are sure to have experienced at one time or another. I know I have... Hugs of affection, Linda |
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Jezzika Member
since 2005-01-05
Posts 154work |
"it’s been one of those days in retrospect subdue it’s been one of those days wrapped up in you....." I loved your poem...this part though i thought was the best. Really, good poetry Jezz |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Wonderfully expressed Susan , I know those feelings Hope |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A joy to read...James |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you all very much for your kindness... Mysteria...I actually write the poem first, then go looking for a picture that will (in my eyes anyway) match what I am saying...sometimes I don't find one, but yes, Hanks has so many that I love....and I owe it to you for showing me to his work~ Jezzika...my little actress....love you kiddo... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sea you not only have a good "eye" with your poetry but also a good eye for the art to match it then These two were meant to be woven together and the result was beautiful! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sea, I really liked this poem even though it had that bluesy feeling about it. The rhythm lends itself well to music I hear in my head while reading it. ....jo |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Oh...this sounds like a lovely, though a heart-breaking, song. As always, Sea, you just express it so softly.. I missed your words as I missed this forum Thank you |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Intensely passionate writing Sea! believe in what your heart feels... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Susan, this was a very emotional read indeed, and I can relate to this feeling as I have been wrapped up in visions and my fantasies of my dream girl I have yet to meet for years and all my emotions can just go to extremes! (sigh) This is beautifully sad, sweet friend, I forever wish you the greatest happiness of love, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*bump* because it should be read more. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"one of those days" . . . longing within aloneness makes for beautiful, romantic melancholy... which you write so well! Hugs, Robert |
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