Greeneyes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind
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2005-11-01
04:58 PM
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that I am indeed lost in the canvas of this form
so I watched the changes in you and me as if I were the souls edge where sea and tide rise -- where moon greets shifting stars
with the passing crumble of stone/s
who will guide me to the 'rest' in nights while I drift on some winter storm awaiting each crystal to form her beauty
I am as empty
as the rose that tries to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer
the press of body between grain and sand where silence fills you
so the rain will fall wet upon your lips
drops of tin and stone
and I will search for the dust of you in broken glass &breaking light to paint color on warmth of flesh and echo my vacant dreams to bury the grey of stone
in the amber of my sleep
to remind me how orchids cry
and I am always within the shades of you ~~ ~~**~~ between echo and dreams lies the farewell ~~**~~
GIMD thank you
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Lauren~
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Aimster
Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
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2005-11-01
05:21 PM
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wow...lauren...just wow- I could never write like this if I tried...your lines way cool but what really strikes me is the depth of feeling. you write more than mere words my friend, you write your heart, your soul, your everything. it is indeed an honor to be able to read something so open, so true, so just so....everything. few are like you, you know true people, people who don't put on airs but are just who they are.
take care & hugs, amy"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"
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Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
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2005-11-01
05:26 PM
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Beautiful..your words are SO enchanting! This is indeed another lovely Lauren keeper. Love ya lady~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, So you won't ever forget me.~
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Nightshade
Member Patricius
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962
just out of reach
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2005-11-01
06:00 PM
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~beautiful~ hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. ~Carl Sandburg
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
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2005-11-01
06:05 PM
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Lauren
"as the rose that tries to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer"
How very lovely that is!!
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
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2005-11-01
06:14 PM
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Lauren....
*SIGH*
goodness... this is so beautiful
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aujussy wolf
Senior Member
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215
Michigan
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2005-11-01
07:59 PM
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to paint color on warmth of flesh and echo my vacant dreams to bury the grey of stone in the amber of my sleep greeneyes ....this is right from the heart passion and magic in a beautiful blend a standing applause !!!! ~wolfman ..... hugs toooo
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Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554
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2005-11-02
03:30 PM
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I am as empty
as the rose that tries to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer
the press of body between grain and sand where silence fills you
so the rain will fall wet upon your lips
drops of tin and stone
and I will search for the dust of you in broken glass &breaking light to paint color on warmth of flesh and echo my vacant dreams to bury the grey of stone
in the amber of my sleep ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Lordy girl... have you found a publisher yet.... your poetry needs to be in print on pages of gold leaf and bound between smoky leather covers. I want to be able to sit on a river bank and read you till I go blind.
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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
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2005-11-03
12:42 PM
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so I watched the changes in you and me as if I were the souls edge where sea and tide rise -- where moon greets shifting stars
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Love, evolves ever so slowly, and still we watch for the tides~
You are so graceful in the rise and fall, like a Lioness, you manage to conquer all and make it look easy, when it's not.
Hugs, Lauren~
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Mistletoe Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon
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2005-11-04
07:43 PM
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(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is a most beautiful bittersweet reflection, dearest friend, it can indeed be a heartache to see the ghost of a muse of love reflected in shards of glass, as I long to find true first love! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, as always your imagery is mesmerizing, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!
May love and light always shine upon you!
Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other"
Mother Teresa
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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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2005-12-20
10:26 AM
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and I will search for the dust of you in broken glass &breaking light to paint color on warmth of flesh and echo my vacant dreams to bury the grey of stone
in the amber of my sleep
to remind me how orchids cry
and I am always within the shades of you ~~ ~~**~~ between echo and dreams lies the farewell ~~**~~
omg Lauren, shame on me, I almost missed this completely. It's a good thing I needed my Lady Lauren fix or I would have missed this completely, and that m'dear would have been a shame.
God, this is soft and beautiful.....seek the flame within yourself and let your soul be cleansed by the fire of love. Axel Ekenstierna
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Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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2005-12-20
02:50 PM
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Sigh, sigh and sighhhh...
I've missed reading you Lauren.
m xxhow i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more ~Neruda~
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garysgirl
Member Laureate
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
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2005-12-22
09:37 PM
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Oh my goodness, Lauren!! This is beauty beyond words, my friend. I am so glad it was brought back up.....otherwise I might have not seen this beautiful work of art!! Thank you so much for sharing your poetry with us, sweet lady. May you and yours have a wonderful holiday season, my friend. Heart Hugs, Ethel
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ctowen
Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT
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posted
2005-12-31
05:45 PM
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between echoes and dreams ....
a storm is never empty, just needs to find its place to release ...
CT
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lucky
Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601
Idaho
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2006-01-01
10:15 PM
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as the rose that tries to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer
beautious
have a wonderful new year. dale
Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again... ~Rosemary J. Gwaltney~
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iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
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2006-01-02
02:12 AM
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"who will guide me to the 'rest' in nights while I drift on some winter storm awaiting each crystal to form her beauty"
Beautiful writing, Lauren. Happy 2006! ....jo
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tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
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2006-01-02
05:14 AM
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WOW!! such beauty, grace, flow and so inspiring. This is a superb write, I wish I had such talent.
LOVED IT
~hugs~ TracieLove is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe
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littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
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2006-01-02
02:06 PM
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Damn Lauren, don't know how this one flew by me but you are in my head, saying things I would have loved to say in the past and odd, I just got an easel for Xmas, so this says so much more to me.
These lines, just man, went right to my chest:
and I will search for the dust of you in broken glass &breaking light to paint color on warmth of flesh and echo my vacant dreams to bury the grey of stone
in the amber of my sleep
to remind me how orchids cry
and I am always within the shades of you
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