Open Poetry #36 |
What we’ve been through |
jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
We were young you loved tightly the reigns always in check. We raced past honeymoon night into kids and bills and cars that needed fixing. My grocery-laundry day became the only respite from your constant controlling. If they say that what we went through was love, then it needed a lot of growing. Middle age cultivated and stockpiled trespasses until they blossomed into hate and reprieve from time together became preferable to harvest. We died a thousand times you and I, sometimes by the other’s hand and sometimes self inflicted. If they say that what we went through was love, then please, lay to rest the afflicted. If this was love then say I that love does die and yet live; love does partake of cruelty’s cup and remain athirst. It can break and be broken, and mend itself again; love is able to withstand a multitude of wrongs. After all these years you and I remain joined and so if they say what we’ve been through is love, then I must love you. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans "We died a thousand times you and I, sometimes by the other’s hand and sometimes self inflicted." All those hard lessons, can make love stronger, but also not. Interesting deduction in the end...logical thinking? I understand how this works, and probably does in most relationships. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
If this was love then say I that love does die and yet live; love does partake of cruelty’s cup and remain athirst. A very strong write Blown away by this poem Tom |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
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martie...smiling@logical thinking, all my prof's in college told me I had a logical mind, guess its showing now in my poetry thank you thomas...thank you so much, I haven't written much for so long, and these that come out now, are a perplexity to me...am glad they are not to the readers |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: Spock would have agreed. Logic, indeed. Also shows a strong will not to be beaten, nor used... for even when the hurt was there... somehow, it seems, there must have remained some trust. And... trust doesn't grow on trees. It's so good to see Karon writing... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hi JB! It is so good to be reading you again. This one hit close to home.. sometimes we struggle so much we wonder if it's worth it. Well said dear lady...well said. Hugs~Nancy ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
tis a good write, thanks for sharing. Poetry can get you very far |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This should be required reading for every couple contemplating marriage... Excellent write! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A poem like this -- thoughts like these -- are so alien to me and so distasteful that I get a nearly physical pain from reading of them. It shames me, and makes me want to go wherever you are, kneel down and apologize on behalf of my half of our species, that one of us treated you so. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
We died a thousand times you and I, sometimes by the other’s hand and sometimes self inflicted. If they say that what we went through was love, then please, lay to rest the afflicted. so so true, dearheart, your a stong willed woman...one whom I'm very proud to read...you say much in words of great passion, but not anger or grief...it's almost as if you understand him, and are willing to allow, to a certain point...and then all hell breaks loose for a while...a simple reminder.... Well done, very well done |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"If this was love then say I that love does die and yet live; love does partake of cruelty’s cup and remain athirst. It can break and be broken, and mend itself again; love is able to withstand a multitude of wrongs. After all these years you and I remain joined and so if they say what we’ve been through is love, then I must love you." Oh, sweetie, you are an honest lady! This has to be one of the nearest things to the truth I've read lately! Applauding you, for I do understand. ....jo |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
nodding in understanding... yep, understood very clearly. Huggin you. live for today, |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
“It's so good to see Karon writing...” ah lady its good I guess for me as well to hear her voice, for a long time now she has been silent thank you lady Nancy, thank you, sigh, I never thought about others who might relate, I just wrote it how it is…… Angel Heart, thank you Suthern…it does put love in a different light doesn’t it? Thank you lady! Ed, thank you, your response gives hope to all who relate, thank you for your apology, though completely unwarranted, and for your kindness LeeJ, thank you for seeing me as strong , thank you Iliana, thank you, my poetry is vexed with honesty, I cannot write it until it sits true in my heart Gentle Spirit, yep I knew you’d understand, thank you |
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