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Allison's Tears (repost for icebox)
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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mystery of a Goddess birth-- one spring night it all began a reckoning of storm emerged. Quiet, as a housewife's tears, with swirl of spoon on supper's stove-- somewhere above, the Gods did hear clouds in Gulf of Mexico. "Yes," they said,"she acted strange." So all the vapors rearranged and swirled with magick of a spoon each tear she cried became monsoon. A gathering of universe it's true, we saw a goddess birthed to at last eat words we spoke when at last the water broke. How she cried in birth, travail, how her tears ran river's trail. Thus her storm became undammed... on and on and on she ran. From Texas coast and inland sure across the southern ghost procured filling creeks and rivers kept a torrent in a woman--wept. All the pain she hid inside bled from the skies in nature's cry... Again, again, she could not stop. Nature spun a sorrow's top. Across the south and up east coast, she wept upon a mighty boast where they'd never seen such rain-- "How can one woman feel such pain?" Allison? She cried for days, that even I am left amazed. I, olympic cryer, sure. Alive and dry--I think I'm cured. * * * And I still maintain it was an accident--hormones, yanno.    |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
All the pain she hid inside bled from the skies in nature's cry... Again, again, she could not stop. Nature spun a sorrow's top. Across the south and up east coast, she wept upon a mighty boast where they'd never seen such rain-- "How can one woman feel such pain?" damn K.... just damn....  It is SOOOO good to have you and your words here again dear lady.  live for today, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen....simply amazing, the way you write!! You know I was just reading about hurricanes, and they have them named clear up to 2010. I was disappointed that not one had my name. I think icebox will love this, I know I did when you posted it for me several years ago! I whisper a very quiet, "we still need rain"!  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well i'll be ...... woohooo you ROCK m'lady  Just, Wow! m ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I, Olympic cryer...." if only you knew how this one line grabs me at this moment............... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Awesome.....yano, I agree with your thinking on this.  ....jojo |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
awesome write, great flow and imagery, well penned. ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
i for one am glad that ye, goddess, were birthed. yup |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Brilliant! Anything else I'd like to say with lessen the impact of "brilliant" so that's it - just brilliant. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I can't believe I missed this. The beauty in these words are only surpassed by your own beauty, inside and out.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
a goddess lives in each of us (womenfolk) when we are not too scared to let the fury rage when need be you kicked it up in here good |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
it amazes me how you take yourself and Earth and put them into one being, no, actually three because you always take yourself and entwine them with another . . . You words hold weight . . . like the eye of a storm, ready to burst . . . upon us all. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
tried to highlight what I like the best...but I would have been highlighting the entire poem...this was so good, well done, very much enjoyed, adding, I'm so sorry for anyone having to go through this...but you have certainly been inspired to share an eye's view with the reader...amazing...you! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote:  Incredibly powerful write, dear Karen! You are one amazing poet! Love, Margherita |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Brava, m'lady! You even captured the "feel" of that swirling mass through your rhythm. jojo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"So all the vapors rearranged and swirled with magick of a spoon each tear she cried became monsoon. A gathering of universe" Scribe the circle thrice around, strike the chime three times the sound, a fifth of candles chosen well four at gates the fifth for tell, light the fires, draw the sign, state desires, sip the wine, free the scented blade of steel, rend the flesh to share the blood for journey stated, senses reel, need sent drawn from circle's sand, behold the elemental is at hand, charge be told for plainest mind, close the gates, snuff the flames, describe the circle thrice in kind, thank the ever present names, strike the chime, as thoughts unwind bindings on live energy to set the elemental free. I have played at times with hurricanes and have had to accept the hard lesson that once they are released into the world they cannot be controlled. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I keep tellin' ya, this time, it wasn't me! Allison was a little slip, though. (With apologies to Texas, Louisiana, Mississippi, Alabama, Georgia, etc. etc. etc...) she did go on and on... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"Nature spun a sorrow's top." Truer words were never writ. Many pardons, m'witch. I haven't been around lately. I'd like to say from lack of time, but truth be known, I own little but (and to forestall what I am sure is to come...I own one of THOSE too LOL) I've been remiss, Miss |
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