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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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It starts with a thin slice of bread sweetened to taste well wishers around the table ends with refreshments partied down and a practiced birthday cable another cut digs into spongy surface salt sprinkled with sweat a lady taken on an annual spin short marriage keepsake on the wall her lot in life kept from fall well-wishers ate to hearts content some days after the days of lent started with thin slices then thicker until a crowd around would bicker celebrated lady cried to still background noise raised to shrill it was an exceptional event to be another day older. and likened to a slice of life portioned to pick sugar then salt sprinkled to specific tastes from a buttered knife. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (10-16-2005 11:25 AM).] |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
a slice of life! |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Certainly a well-written "slice". Loved the flow, the balance.. the way it all fell together, precisely sliced  Pepper |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Liked the comparison very much! *hugs*....jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Writer, I am always intrigued by your vignettes. I find your overviews and perspectives on slices of life fascinating!  EA |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Me too, what Earth Angel said~~  M |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
Thanks for sharing your viewpoint slices |
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