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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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Where you begin and I end; the edges of our portraits are blurry, as if the artist was in such a hurry he dropped the detail brushes from his hands, to be swallowed by the shifting sands. The sketchy once-upon-a-time scene, a distant stretch of warm sandy beach, our names encircled by a heart, etched together as if forever might be real, not fantasy. But we let the waves of time cover us, then saw them wash away our foothold, leaving nothing but the ridges of our collapse. And what was supposed to be a timeless portrait of you and me, became simply, a blurred memory. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kacy....I felt this too....the changing of the way things are, as if washed away by some caprecious wave. Time is never still, and all things change...wishing you a new sandcastle!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Martie, thank you for letting me know you FELT this. |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
enjoyed this piece bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Midnitesun You cut this one with a knife. LOL Beautifully done. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Yes mam I've been there. But I refuse to give up forever. Very well done. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Obsidian Snow Member
since 2005-08-24
Posts 88 |
"a blurred memory" how sad.. and how well written. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So beautifully written ~ so incredibly sad... May the next love portrait be picture-perfect and last forevermore.  Linda |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Sad but true of so many people embroiled in this thing called life. I enjoyed the read. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Perfect! This is a beautiful write. Sometimes, as this does so well portray, in our lives we place all we have into what we perceive as an all or none situation, for better or worse, until the end, etc, etc… And to our dismay it most often ends up the negative. Store-up your possessions in Heaven; He will never disappoint you. JL |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Kacy..you brought back feelings with this write that I had thought long gone.. I guess I still have blurred memories. Hugs~Nancy ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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RennieandBoo Junior Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 47Florida! |
I love the write! keep it up! I enjoy it so much!! Things will get better!!!MWAH! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 Nancy, I'm sorry if this one stirred up a sad memory. But I guess many have experienced this down side of Love.Thanks to each of you, for reading and leaving your kind comments! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the blurs just make the better ones better |
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Sharksbean Member
since 2005-09-25
Posts 368jax |
this makes me sad  thank you for sharing this piece-may the force be with you in poetry |
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saved_by_grace Member
since 2005-01-08
Posts 332In the arms of God... |
Thank you for this one, Kacy, it brought back a great memory for me! And although it has faded a bit...I'm ever so glad that I had it to begin with... This was incredible... ...Becka |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
sometimes blurring is a good thing.. perhaps and perhaps. This is still echoing within me, and I find it hard to find the words... Pepper |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Where you begin and I end; the edges of our portraits are blurry, as if the artist was in such a hurry he dropped the detail brushes from his hands, to be swallowed by the shifting sands." Is this perfection, or what! ....jo |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
You know, I am reading Billy all the Shel Silverstein books (gotta get 'em started early in this genre, ya know?) and God, this reminded me so much of what we have been reading . . . besides the foremost thing I saw, a collapse of love or a relationship or quite possibly just missing someone, as life tends to do to us, takes away our time, but also I looked so close and saw that sketcy one time scene and dang Kacy, you just described how it is to write. *smile* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kacy~ I read you and smile at the neverending beauty of you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Where you begin and I end; the edges of our portraits are blurry, as if the artist was in such a hurry he dropped the detail brushes from his hands, to be swallowed by the shifting sands. Absolutely lovely Kacy m xx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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