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the last note quivering
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the last note quivering |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Mother I am here in you in your waves of resolute rages of you constitute words unsigned by men. aligned in truth you scream the keen howling through the trees you dreamed the increments and bend of reeds harmonics planted by the seeds of cones and cypress spores and leaves flying from the trees that bleed bending stradivarius - he must have watched this to conceive an instrument that tends to bend in the care of hands of men with such sensitivity to know that birth that bitch was this: woman shuddering the earth weeping blood of them that end life for sake of war... it is the last note quivering. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
WOW K, This poem is extremely powerful.. I've missed your poetry so much!! <3333 <-- that's either a really loving heart, or an ice-cream cone, whichever you'd like better! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Thank you for this very large candle, its light will shine a very long time.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
surely she hears you and just good to see you this sunday morning |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hugging you tight. Once again...welcome home Karen. You have been SO missed. ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Well done, Grasshopper. I am glad you took notes. We all are honored that you share this understanding. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Yes !!!  Brava !!!Been waiting so long for another withcyone entry for my library !! Hugging you tight in my heart. Chrislane |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and she comes back, stronger than ever the storm might have been... |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Wonderful, Nothing less than we expected from you... Welcome back, martyjo |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Welcome back Karen. So glad to see you and read your wonderful poetry. Hope all is well .... hugs, Marti Living simply and calmly in the mountains! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
One word---vibrating No, two----vibrating and visible Wrong again, add a third---audible Loved the feel and look and sound of this.. ----------ice ><> [This message has been edited by ice (10-09-2005 09:31 PM).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen....Icebox has called me grasshopper a couple of times...and I've always felt it to be the highest compliment...I know you deserve it. You amaze me!  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Nothing less than I would expect for your grand re-entrance... Just... wow... Welcome home, Karen...   "When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." --Jimi Hendrix |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
sighhh just WOW! absolutely awesome I don;t know what else to say..but...WOW! love you m'lady mxx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Good to read you again Karen. Excellent write. TD |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Serenity, this was awesome, reminding me, making me feel that last glimspe of strength, hiding deep down inside, for those times, when man, is on his last leg.... This was a powerful read |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
you're incredible, yanno that? just had to come back for another read. m xx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's mother nature, that gets the "incredible" title. This one, for those who didn't know, was inspired by Mother Earth changes. And it's true yanno. When mama ain't happy, nobody's happy. Love to all. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karen!!!!! I am so glad to see your words. And, what a string of words this is! Incredible piece, absolutely wonderful writing, lady.....saving it, printing it out, and OMG, this is my favorite to date! You sure have been missed. Love ya, jojo |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Just had to come back for another read....this is sooooo good. ....jo |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Wow, amazingly powerful! ~*~I'm a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hearing mother's strad quiver within your unique imagery hearing the mother's notes ~rock, roll and rule~ echoing in the canyons the wind rustling the leaves tossing the waves of the seas pushing and pulling tectonic plates bringing each of us to our knees listen to yer mamma |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is no Mother quite like her either is there? Great job on this one, loved it. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Powerfully written. Good to see you here again...sharing with us once more. believe in what your heart feels... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Daughter. I lie there writhing in agony. Begging of you, hold my hand, as a midwife between my legs, now splayed to the Heavens. Oh, it was time, and I secretly swore to Eve for the curse of the pain I now felt. With each rush of fire beneath, my back arched and I screeched. Tears flowing from each side of my face. Wetting the cloth, pristine beneath me. I swore to the sky with each gasp of breath and wave of anguish. And pushed forth from me, everything that lies beneath the ground and flies within the sky. I pushed forth the stars and with it, the Moon. When I screamed, I was heard on high and the angels joined me in choir. And when I had expelled all of my prejudices, my disdain and my failures, I then sat up and heaved forth every needle pinch to skin and each bleed of my heart. When I opened my mouth, with head held back, as that of a woman, crazed, I heard them wail . . . And I then let out my breath and fell back, destroyed. I held this creation to my chest, turning my head to the Heavens And a lone tear escaped from breath caught . . . I held them to my heart and cried. For I knew . . . -------------------- The End. (of the beginning) |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
very powerful this is and thanks for sharing this. Poetry can get you very far |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
this was very powerful, thanks for sharing this. Poetry can get you very far |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Beautiful, sensitive, elegant, and touching! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh my heart... leave it to you...more, I pray, more. We'll talk soon love. and thanks, to the Mom. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There is a time soon after birth when pondering the pride the worth of the pain of laboring for babies, who can't smile. They hunger for the teat and bite and even gums display a might of the will to live that gives a gasp of tender pain to breast. Time becomes the keeper of the measurement of "am I loved" by this being of my loins suckling my sweat... Eyes intent upon my own need or greed or love purloined until the day they smile it is a toss of coin and loneliness "but give to me my child" she says: "My milk is ready to be fed and I have gallons yet to bleed that does not question worthiness." Mother Daughter sister Sun, Brother Father everyone-- the rain falls equally in sheets that beg a clothespin and a breeze drying us, our tears and Lethe is but the river of regret and our love too tight to chest-- soured by the stinginess of what we should have gave away... every single day. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOWZERS!I am keeping this in my treasure chest! Karen, this should be quilled on parchment, framed and signed.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Mother Daughter sister Sun, Brother Father everyone-- the rain falls equally in sheets that beg a clothespin and a breeze drying us, our tears and Lethe is but the river of regret and our love too tight to chest-- soured by the stinginess of what we should have gave away... every single day." Ok, lady....another one of excellence! Would you please post this one separately. It deserves more attention....all on its own. Thanks for reading my heart tonight. *hugenyoutight*......jojo |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
and in that child who cannot smile lies a certain wonder lost to us in that moment we cannot comprehend thought of such life, that existence those early months of intuition, of forgetting A babe in arms is but a soul escaping. I often wonder who I was forgetting when I cried not knowing why or for what, rather that I knew I was not where I was a lifetime ago. And dare the mother - curls hanging limp about her weary smile, half - hearted thinking she is to blame for this calamity. I revoke my right. It is not I, mother who creates the soul of Son. It is I, a vessel, which carries such precious cargo. It is I, woman who bears fruit of shame, The stinging beauty of bringing one soul back to what? Do I dare question such occurence? Have I the right to ponder those cries? I sit in golden silence troubled by this world and I followed myself to my garden. Where life is constantly regenerating. And there, among autumn leaves and newly grown weeds, stood a bushel of mums. I could not help but smile at their full angelic faces as they danced with the wind, for all the pains of this world. As if to say, "See? We have not left in the darkest hour." I lifted bloom to face and knew, right then, we are blessed: with fate fight strife horror love hate human nature abound and alive streaming from the gutters, screeching for just one sip of Mother's Milk. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling... My father had a harem. and I inhale your bouquet. I'd love to post these four together, for I can think of no better ending than a beginning. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
*smile* an honor. You are reading my mind again, K. I want to put this in another place too, ok? |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Well, Karen and Sue, you both convey such pain as surely Mother Nature must feel as humans encroach upon more. Your writing is both image-wrought and sensitive. Well done! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yup, yup, they belong together in their own heavenly space.  Good grief! You have to even ask why I am reading not posting, LOL. Smiling at you two big time, see this is fichue nourriture magnificant juste de cerveau at its finest.  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Smiling huge at my sisters... You two are beauty... Love ya both... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well? If it's okay with the mods, I'm all for it Susie Q. But you do it. You know how to make 'em purty. Besides, I'm tard.  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
For m'witchfriend...From years ago Sing sultry spring Purple billows fill Blackening bellows Leaf dance Sway willows Wind caress satin breast Trees wicked lash Spanish Moss Mardi Gras Silver shot streaked Sky shatters cracked Crypt flicker Gargoyles gaze grinning Gawking Taunting Smolder beckons Into shadow swirl Warm marble skin Mock mirrors Cold granite kin His eyes illuminate Pale beauty With lust luster At once, captured Trapped sweet And released Freed and again Animal ardor animates Passions’ beast Snarling howls fill Hollow echo, Pierce stillness Then stilled Passions beast Now two Cooling quiet, steams On wet moss Sing sultry spring |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And OH! I am remiss. My two favorite women sing beautifully together, here! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Precious lady, I do not think you will ever know the power that your words will hold in healing so very many, and in touching so many, in many different ways and for many different reasons.. I believe you know, without me saying it but what the hell, I will... WELCOME HOME, and K? thank you, for blessing these halls and our lives with the gift of YOU and your words. and you two?  When you write together, you take your words and hearts and match them in perfect blend... geez.... your both incredible ladies. printing this and keeping them in you fine ladies folders live for today, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok your bending my arm way behind my back, now, K. *laughing* Should I just leave it in here, as a thread, with all of the beautiful responses? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You could, and keep it going pahleeze? How perfectly exquisitve this writing is. |
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