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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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Unsheathed From hard woods dark, desolate Come to how hearts slowly die Naked, one bleeds upon slate While the other lies nigh Unable to wash their mate Of tears they did not dry Dull thy sword so create Not the pain that makes us cry For I believe not our fate So pathetic to deny Safety in a place and state And tell me not what makes one great To cut with an unsheathed sword! -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (; I went back to this poem and relized thatit might be confused as a sonnet. I didn't mean it to be a sonnet. I may have messed up on the old english so if any one has pointers please tell me. This is not personal, more global. I just look at the world and it makes me sick. I don't know. I think I messed up on the second line I maybe should of done a play on words there to, because the flow doesn't seem right. I will think about it more. [This message has been edited by Juju (07-10-2005 06:00 PM).] |
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youcan'tseeme Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 88 |
nice write |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Thank you, -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
So true, Juju. Good write. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
thank you, -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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