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Her Dress Was Red.
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Her Dress Was Red. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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I was not given a life that I'd really want to remember.. Nor one with stories I could tell my grandchildren.. For once, my mind is letting me forget. Walking eases the mind, so I used to think before I crossed the old railroad tracks.. Even if I wanted to, I couldn't go back.. I recall love and hate, painful embraces that I found most addicting.. Misery and my torn womb caught in memories... but if you die before I do.. I know my mind will never let me forget, time will change my whole life in a second.. but I will never let myself accept it. We were not given lives to remember, we were not blessed with stories we were here, simply. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh...my goodness.  |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
this was very sad, it makes me want to cry because i sometimes say that my life is a total reck but to have nothing is so sad.. but that poem you wrote kaoru was very goodly worded, it teaches me how to cherish what I have in life.. thanks for sharing this, i enjoyed reading it... Poetry can get you very far |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I was not given a life that I'd really want to remember.. Nor one with stories I could tell my grandchildren.." ~ The beginning of the story that is in you, begging to be written?!? Hugs with love, Linda |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kaoru You have many amazing poems to share!  and, the sensitivity it took to write them!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Simply...Awesome! i've missed reading you.mxx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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crazy4u Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 67 |
This is a very heartfelt insightful write. I like the title you have chosen. I will have to read this one again. Thanks for the poem. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 Heartfelt, Kaoru. ....jo |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Meghan Very well written, style and form.. The content is disturbing , but understandable, many people share your grief and grievance.. It seems your history has carried you into the present in crude arms, but that does not take away the fact that you can become the master of your destiny. I understand fully that that might seem impossible at the moment...But...I am quite sure that it is not. Please seek whatever help is available to remedy your pain, in the way of counceling, It seems that your present world needs to stop in order for you to procede and shape your life like you would like it... What I am urging you to do is work towards becoming the master of your soul.. Perhaps start by reading this poem... (Invictus) http://www.bartleby.com/103/7.html Which ends in this stanza... "It matters not how strait the gate, How charged with punishments the scroll, I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. " Study the poem carefully, with an open mind I believe this can, and will help you. Peace---------------ice ><> |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
her dress was read the content of her was studied her nudity was removed from the cellophane and clothed in pen speak enjoyed this side of your hidden not the agony, but the photographs |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"but if you die before I do.. I know my mind will never let me forget" unsettling isn’t it? I love you girlie girl |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Every time I read you I am left simply amazed.. ah Meg, this is so deep and painful, but so very beautiful.. live for today, |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
somethings seem left unended in life ... waiting for that "perfect" moment to be explained. sometimes the moment never comes .... sometimes we never see it, and sometimes ... it's always there ... you are the author of the story of "U" ... no one could tell it better ... or wiser CTA word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05 |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So painful...yet a great write. Heart hugs. |
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Obsidian Snow Member
since 2005-08-24
Posts 88 |
You layer your meaning so artfully..very, very well done! |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
This poem tears at the heart...I felt your pain....Stunningly powerful...**big hugs** |
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