Open Poetry #36 |
Naked but a Sheet |
miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
She lies across his sofa Naked, but a sheet Embarrassed, flustered, A little flushed from heat. “Color me with water The fish in the lake, Soft sheens of silver, Grades of muted greens. Color with a hint of gold, With Blue and lilac make Thyself sensually aquatic Gliding into dreams” With a cocked brow and “Hm…” Shall I draw to scale Realistically ...The human mermaid? No, for only in reincarnation would Like Her you ever seem. For you are much more amiable than an underwater queen! I like you j-u-s-t the way you are. Holddd the seductive smile, please…” He expands the drapes to sunset So the colors he can rake The blush of an innocence Brush on womans cheeks The sheen of sun falls upon them Orange, magenta… subtleties wide awake Swell in them the colored sky The union of artist/model speaks. ~miscellanea~ [This message has been edited by miscellanea (08-20-2005 10:41 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Keeping this.... oh yes! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
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Marvellous! Reading this, I can see every expression, every move....and feel the subtle tension in the room. This is excellent work! Think I'll ditto Sunshine and keep this one around for a while..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
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extraordinaryily well done, what an idea...the very vission of unspoken converstaion...this is a standing ovation with candles and not leaving until I get an uncore! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
See what happens when one can't sleep! Thank you all! Lee, an encore? Let me take a raincheck on this--my creative juices just aren't flowing very consistently! Hadn't written anything good for a long time-I was due this one by sheer probability! miscellanea [This message has been edited by miscellanea (08-20-2005 12:39 AM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
miscie, Cool, it's hard to beat romantic. Nicely done. And we can wait for the encore, as you know we will. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Sensual beauty flows perfectly from you words created a vision of beauty....I love it...*big hugs* |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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misce This feels so natural, yet provacative...as if I was spying on someones very private time. Brava!! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Martie, You spoil sport! We're not? If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Martie
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Larry...calm down bro, I said "I" not "we". LOL! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
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A marvel! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
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Startime, Glad you thought this sensually beautiful. Quite a compliment for me as I'm about as sensual of a thinker as a rock. This was written by the artist/model, not myself. Glad you enjoyed the poem. miscellanea Martie, "This feels so natural, yet provacative...as if I was spying on someones very private time. Brava!!" Hadn't thought of it that way. Maybe the artist should adjust the drapes! Bad pun, I know... So glad you found it interesting. misce Larry, Being one hundred percent an honorable gentleman, I rest assured you wouldn't be spying on the lovely lady. Right? Of course, you're not a detective or under cover agent or anything like that. Seriously, I'm glad this amused you. I've enjoyed reading Martie's and your bantering responses, as well. miscie iliana, Glad you liked it. As you've recently taken up the hobby of art, I thought you might like it. (Keep up with art, Jo! Your portrait of the baby has so much character! It expresses joy very well, and I'm not just saying that 'cause I'm your sister.) love, miscellanea |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Now this is truly an outstanding piece of deeply inspired and inspiring poetry, dear misc! You created an atmosphere that can be lively experienced by the reader. Great! Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well -- they say lightning never strikes twice in the same place....but it isn't true. Virtually every stroke of lightning is made of many strikes in quick succession, in exactly the same place. SO -- the real probability is, you've got more of this lightning waiting, and it'll be coming very soon....I can feel my hair starting to stand on end exactly now...... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent, exquisite piece of work! I too ask for an encore!!! Brava! Hugs~Nancy Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
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Margherita, It is so good to hear from you again! I've been wondering where you went. Haven't seen your poetry lately, but then again, I haven't been online much. Thanks for dropping by. I'll be watching for your poetry. miscellanea RAtleader, See. Ya get me thinkin' every time you let those words roll. Even in your response. Is that how lighning really works. Amazing! Thanks for striking twice, Ed. miscellanea Enchantress, I had been thinking about you, too, my dear Enchantress. As I said, I haven't been on line a whole lot, but when I am, I look for your poetry. It seems that you haven't been posting when I've been on line. I miss reading your poetry. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I hope you are doing well. miscellanea |
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