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Disregarding Adam ( A Duet with Serenity Blaze)
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Disregarding Adam ( A Duet with Serenity Blaze) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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The light played on the glistening the night with one ear listening suede to touch the fingertip I must feel this with my lips the buds of tongue are seraphim trumpeting the taste of dew and oh I know the taste of you as a honeybee abuzz dizzy dancing circle eight— heavy in the dross of wing shaking off your kiss I am drunk with drink of petaling and if I were not filled to sate I could fly between the space of the bars in vertical damn I wish that I were her a broad arm bitch of pedigree granted freedom of your face tracing lingerings of lines English ivies twisting time as if I curlicued the rhyme of loving green in tranquil grace in the cast of light of lace in blush between the leaves, I say: I must feel this with my lips Dark pines hold fast in snare stretched across the presence there: the bells, the bells announce the wind clockwork - tattooing the lind still she stands full of leaves full of fruits gathered chest flower grown, flower blest lover of the dew drosophila brewed. There I see her name on leaf silent with the vines offers us the seed of spring and delivers us the lime. ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Knowing smile, heavy sigh... library bound... in gold leaf. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
*damn*  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Angel Grage A stuff. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
smiling here. brava ladies. Keeper indeed |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
WOW!! You two write so well together...I love it...*big hugs* |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So good!!!  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Now the both of you know, I adore a write that leaves me searching, one which educates me in areas in which my mind has not yet wandered. And after reading this, of course I went searching, (thank you for that) and I saw a faerie like girl, unaware of the thorn and bramble which awaited her, dancing, dancing, singing to the treetops. Unashamed of her situation, happy to be alive, actually, just being herself. How it should have been. And the undertones of a societal religiosity. Beautiful ladies, take a bow. This is seen, to me, the true essence of woman. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
So, m'love, you wanna be Lilith or Eve? *chuckle* Thanks for sharing with me a different view of paradise. I love you much.  I applaud you for taking this to the unexpected.  thank you |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Nice teamwork!!! Really enjoyed your duet, Ladies! misc'e |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I came back to share a joke (y'knew I would yeti  )The moral of the poem is a lesson from Lilith: "Don't get mad--get EVE!"  gawd-I-love-this-place smoooooooooooches maree and yep, Ed too. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How about "I don't give a-dam"? If I had to select two people who I would be sure could combine to create a stellar piece of writing....yep, it would be you two. Hats off to the creation  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yeah, well... If there hadn't been an Adam or the "bite" this little apple wouldn't be nearly as sweet. plbbbbbbbbbt! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yell well m'Yeti, if there hadn't been an Adam he wouldn't have pointed the finger at Eve, saying, "she made me do it!" I went through my research about Adam and Eve with Karen, and she knows my theory dontca Karen? Here I will refer you to paragraph 4 in Adam and Eve, showing the very first chauvinist, phaaat!  No wonder we like to shop! You guys blame, we go shop!http://www.hobrad.com/anda.htm#ADAM Ladies, this did NOT surprise me, it delights though. (First part was Karen yes?) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Fabulous duet! You two really do poetry justice! Also, enjoyed all the comments, and  your humor, Karen! ....jo |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
ROFL @ Karen, Ed and Deer...Thank you everyone, this is mostly Karen, i jus added a few lines... Sigh m'lady you're amazing and thank you for this opportunity...once more, this is our um 4th duet believe it? And all still as exciting as the first  you ROCK! "you wanna be Lilith or Eve?" Can't I be both m'love? Mxx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
two of me favorite girlies twostepping... GLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE oh this just rocks...so many awesome images and symbols... Lilith or Eve? they were poets right? hehYOU TWO ARE!!! very cool groovy gals. I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
pssssst did ya know the serpent was a female too... enjoyed the combine of you two D |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
whoa!!! Have you come to realize just how penetrating this was? Wow...that's all I have....Wow!!!! and echoing all of the comments above Extremely magnificant writing! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow! Not often that a poem has me sitting there reading it straight through three or four times (that's a guess, I honestly couldn't say how many), and still having to remind myself to breathe. There are duets, and there are duets....and there is this beyond-duet. I recently emptied out my library, wanting to start fresh.....fill 'er up! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
goodness ladies....whew...this is awesome! |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
sooo hottt !!! this poem is smoking ... very beauteous ladys ~wolfman |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
she is beauteous I am lucky.  danke' mah maree |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh my, glad I found this. to both of you.for doing this beauty. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Friggin' awesome!! Saving this, girls. Will ever the morning |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"the buds of tongue are seraphim trumpeting the taste of dew and oh I know the taste of you as a honeybee abuzz dizzy dancing circle eight— heavy in the dross of wing shaking off your kiss" Where in the world was I when this first hit the blue sceen? never mind, I offer thanks to the one who brought it back for us latecomers~'tis an awesome beautimous piece of passionate poetry~ BRAVISSIMO! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ah, how many times have I dreamt of you two together. and know you've written too, bonus. |
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