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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2005-07-05 11:53 PM

Sing
sad songs
nightingale.
The evening's growing cold.

Flowers curl
within their beds
as clouds
obscure the moon.

What stars tonight
won't be as bright
as once
they were ago

when Spring was green
and full of dreams

so unaware
of snow.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-07-06 08:53 AM

yes, and it is exactly as you describe it...so unaware of snow...bittersweet moments relived...

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-07-06 10:08 AM

when Spring was green
and full of dreams

so unaware
of snow.

~*~

Thank goodness for persistent seasons...

Enjoyed this very much.

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2005-07-07 11:23 PM

I like this one alot.

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

4 posted 2005-07-08 05:46 AM

"when Spring was green
and full of dreams

so unaware
of snow."

On the whole, touching, but this part I felt so much.

Dee

Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

5 posted 2005-07-13 03:19 PM

I love the haiku feel of this one. Nicely done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2005-10-25 09:47 PM

Old so often has a beauty of its own...like this poem.

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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2005-10-26 12:27 PM

Silky...beautiful flow...James

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2005-10-26 01:32 PM

"What stars tonight
won't be as bright
as once
they were ago

when Spring was green
and full of dreams

so unaware
of snow."

Beautiful John..especially the above lines,
which could stand alone as a poem.
Hugs~Nancy

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me.~

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

9 posted 2005-10-26 05:37 PM

Excellent. Liked the melancholy, reminiscent mood.

Goes with the touch of frost on my ...umm..windowsill...heh.

CG

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2005-10-26 05:40 PM

John....There is music in this poem...it pleases my ear.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

11 posted 2005-10-27 12:02 PM

Amazing. These lines ache so powerfully.
Saving this...

Always, Alyssa

Hupomeno.

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

12 posted 2007-04-22 11:50 PM

so depressed.
one can't dream with open eyes.

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