Greeneyes
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2005-08-12
01:01 AM
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I wait for you knowing you will not come how I could have guessed the stranger in your face considering me
so I climbed the stairs past the flowers for the lover on the lonely shelf
mark me the light of bare walls ~ reading again ---
your letters told me this:
with certain line as if it had always been the one word
neither of us could say
In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes this art
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Lauren~
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Janet Marie
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2005-08-12
01:21 AM
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mark me the light of bare walls ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
oh yessssss... thank you for this last lovely read of the nite.
Oh and your sig? You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes this art
oh yes it does become art. Heart-Art!!
I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain I don't mind helping you out ... But I want you to remember my name
Alanis
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Gentle Spirit
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2005-08-12
08:55 AM
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"I wait for you knowing you will not come"
L girlie... you've no idea how much I know this particular ache...
nor how much I feel your words and hear your heart speak...
sis...
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LeeJ
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2005-08-12
09:07 AM
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such fine understanding you have, which not only flows through your words, but teaches as well...
this soft flow of integrity leaves me a little wiser...and gives great hope that the world will be a little bit better for you guys...thank you and Happy Friday...
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ctowen
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2005-08-12
09:50 AM
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here, here ....
unheard words speaking volumes.
CT
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Startime55
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2005-08-12
09:53 AM
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WOW!!! This poem is so heartfelt it left me stunned....**big big hugs**
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Interloper
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Deep in the heart
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2005-08-12
05:33 PM
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that unspoken word a strange one in your absence emancipating Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.
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Martie
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2005-08-12
06:29 PM
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Lauren
The whole poem is great, but the last lines hit me in the heart!
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Ratleader
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2005-08-12
11:17 PM
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Lovely...of course.... Insightful...of course.... Gentle...of course.... And, of course....good.~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________
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Sunnyone
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2005-08-13
01:31 AM
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Lauren, I said it once a long time ago, and here it is again: your writing always reminds me of a peaceful, smooth river, that I can dip my toes into and really do some thinking about life!!! I really enjoyed this one, my friend...~S~
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Goldenrose
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2005-08-13
05:33 AM
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I agree with sunny here..but rivers have jagged little rocks that the smooth water runs over...
thank you for your words...
Goldenrose.Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba.
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-13
08:23 AM
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love and hugsss and thank you for taking time to read.....
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lol GR I would agree so be careful how far you wish to wade in even smooth waters can turn on ya.... In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes this art
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Goldenrose
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2005-08-13
08:56 AM
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GE... LOL ..Thank you for the advice...but there is nothing in any water..jungle..or desert...that holds fears for me..i can deal with them all equally well..with the help of god and my own steel trap mind...
Have a nice day...
Goldenrose.Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba.
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Jason Lyle
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2005-08-13
10:45 AM
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Awesome!
Jason
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-13
11:53 AM
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GR your comment made me think of superman, Have a great day yourself..
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Hi Jason, thank you for stopping by....
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hugssss all...
~~**~~ You're so vain you probably think this song is about you (CS) ~~**~~
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garysgirl
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2005-08-13
01:44 PM
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Lauren, I felt this. You have a way of doing that.......making your readers feel what you feel. Hugs,
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ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
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2005-08-14
02:34 AM
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... I was just thinking ... poinsetta's or daffidils?
.... either would be soothing, yet not quite a statement ...
... not 'til such time may have arose ...
... a flower IS still a flower.
CTA word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05
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Dark Angel
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2005-08-14
05:55 AM
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Oh..another stunner!
M ~i want for myself your trembling~
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Goldenrose
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2005-08-15
04:43 AM
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GE...not superman....compassionate man..there is a difference...silent but strong... History will show the brave fight of the war of the roses...have a day of tranquility....
GoldenROSE.Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba.
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-15
08:26 AM
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History will show the brave fight of the war of the roses...I actually prefer orchids over roses anyday..LOL but that was a great movie....war of the roses....but I am not much for war.... you should see the movie if you havent....
~~**~~ You're so vain you probably think this song is about you ~~**~~
[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (08-15-2005 11:12 AM).]
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-15
12:06 PM
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Ethel Craig Maree....
thank you for the comments, appreciated and heartfelt.....
Craig--orchids... I have always loved them....
hugss and love....
~~**~~ You're so vain you probably think this song is about you ~~**~~
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ctowen
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2005-08-15
12:51 PM
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Orchids ... they make a beautiful statement! romance, passion, love ... individualism unique and unforgetful
I see why they would be for you!
CT
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-15
01:03 PM
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Craig... thank you...
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D.Lester Young
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2005-08-15
04:54 PM
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Enjoyed loved the line, "mark me the light of bare walls"
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iliana
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2005-08-15
04:56 PM
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Just sitting here on a rainy day, watching the light pattern change on the wall...the perfect setting for reading your lovely write, Lauren. ....jo
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-15
07:52 PM
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D.Lester Young, iliana...
thank you for stopping by...
iliana...I wish it was raining here.... ~~**~~ You're so vain you probably think this song is about you ~~**~~
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yv
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2005-08-16
01:26 AM
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How enchanting. Lovely write!Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.
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ctowen
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2005-08-25
11:23 AM
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Like Susan said .... your work belongs front and center with all the other brilliant poets ... not just today ...
roses or orchids, there is always truth of heart!
Luvs U
CTA word in hand is worth two in a hush ... CTOwen/05
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-26
12:35 PM
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yv....thank you for stopping in....your thoughts mean a lot...
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Craig...
luv you2...big ole' bear hugs...and thank you!
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Gentle Spirit
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2005-08-26
04:59 PM
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Heeeeyyyy Lady Lauren, miss greeneyes exotica.....
I just have to know... you did read my mind before you wrote this one yes??
again, I can not begin to describe just how this landed in my heart gal....
sigh.....
I DO love reading your PERFECT POETRY
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Dark Stranger
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2005-08-26
05:14 PM
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lady laauren.. I am jealous of the dreams you wear here..enjoyed your heart play
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Greeneyes
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2005-08-26
05:25 PM
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Donna...luv you ~
Dark...
come on over... hugsss you --
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