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Open Poetry #35

the puzzle pieces

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2005-03-16 12:57 PM

I still don’t know how
to put that moment
into proper perspective,
for there was nothing proper about it.
But to assign it to some hidden corner,
some remote refuge of my memory banks
just doesn’t seem right either,
and so I sit here silently...
holding onto crystalline fragments of you
as if they could somehow add up
to more than the sum of you
in fleeting thoughts
or illusionary actions.
And even if I never am able
to put it all together?
each puzzle piece is meaningful,
in its solitary confinement.
I just haven't yet found
the proper perspective.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

1 posted 2005-03-16 06:02 AM

Enjoyed the analogy of a moment and puzzle,
Good open poetry,
This style fits the subject
And is made to work by the phrases.
Usually I prefer a stricter form,
But this shows why it is accepted
Where style fits mood.

Gloom

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2005-03-16 08:36 AM

sometimes the pieces fit
and sometimes they just dont

leave the puzzle unsolved
more surprises sometimes

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2005-03-16 08:42 AM

"holding onto crystalline fragments of you
as if they could somehow add up
to more than the sum of you"

We always seem to want the sum of more than they were...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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