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from the journal of an insomniac gone mad
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from the journal of an insomniac gone mad |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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from the journal of an insomniac gone mad it's the madness caught within my womb how flesh_like you stand before me caught in the black black BLACK of this pregnant moment we, loved too late i, loved too much the mist of you blatant torture, this night is creeping across my face stay stay stay does the sentiment of flowers lose its fragrance on nonbelievers if the spikes outside my window wear this skin i cower in would i then be worthy would i then find you not, mortal but ever after we sleep after we love after the sun steals from the midnight sheath our sweat a pearls ransom lingering on horizons found in a vulture's eye creep creep creep one side of my body weak one hand open i am my own nightmare i am not the whisper subtle and demure school-girl plaid and chaste i laced my tongue on your thigh at midnight swallowing your plea for me to remember her but she never mattered to me she never cared that you were me and we and us and that your voice your thrusting seed will always be mine ©sdt'04 "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
I see so many things in this, but mostly i see great writing...thank you... Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Enjoyed  Andrew |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow... I liked the wild, untamed nature of this. And all of the feeling too. Excellent. ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Love this Snow. Looks like I have a lot of reading to do as soon as I get my computer fully up and running again. Caught 3 viruses and had to format the hard drive and start all over again. LOL! Really got to stop visiting those, "Hot girls want you," sites. ROFLMAO! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Good lord, you always give me goosebumps. This writing was fearless and vulnerable at the same time. stunning. I'm sure that makes no sense to you, but it does me. "does the sentiment of flowers lose its fragrance on nonbelievers if the spikes outside my window wear this skin i cower in" Ah! Library. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Everything you write amazes me lady.... simply amazes me... well done. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
your amazing...shivers run up and down my soul after reading you....amazing, the passion you evoke, the blatant honesty, pure and realistic, in forms and shapes of images, sounds....the reader feels and hears...amazing!!! Did I say, amazing? |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
and my insomnia is soooo boring . . . dang! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
outstanding work here. Very much enjoyed. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've tried picking out my favorite lines... and can't do it... it's seamless... and wonderful! |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
all of the insomniac poems are very personal (to me) (not all of my writing is based on fact... that would be why i call it creative writing *smile*) anyway.... your comments to this one really mean so much to me. as they always do, but when i hide so much in layers upon layers in other pieces and then throw *me* into the ones in this series, well... you help make the exposure not so painful. thank you all very much. snow "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Hey Snow, I agree with everyone else on this piece. Enjoyed the read. :-) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A challenge from Ed -- spend a moment today, thinking about how we should treat a good person who is one of PiP's finest poets....if not this one, then one of your choice....it seems we need to. |
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